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Mercy Mistress
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Mercy Mistress |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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it was not all your fault. I suspected right away your heart was but a vault. I thought love could unlock locks-- compassion melt that cold steel box. I believed the fairytale that passion cured most every ail. I discounted every sign that you had spent a life of crime of taking more than what you need, your spirit but a ghoul of greed. Yet I have learned so much from you I have learned what not to do. I learned that it is degradation to tolerate humiliation. The pain you cause so willingly shames you more than it shames me. No longer will I beg to please-- Now it's YOU upon your knees; just perhaps I'll hear request and warm my heart to ease distress-- but first I'd like you to confess and beg of me: "mercy, mistress." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done..and I love the ending line... I do so enjoy your writes... nice to see... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I thought love could unlock locks-- compassion melt that cold steel box. I believed the fairytale that passion cured most every ail. ========================== Yet I have learned so much from you I have learned what not to do. ========================= The pain you cause so willingly shames you more than it shames me. ========================= a moth no more...knows the score...look at her soar  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
AND..... dont give up on the fairy tale... ya know what they say me twin... ya gotta kiss a lot of frogs before ya find your prince... are ya stocked up on chapstick *winkiewinkie*  me |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ah yes, but what would your answer be??? well done, I loved the flow and the feelings of loss in this one. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
S, I so admire your attitude, and I agree, we are partly to blame when we believe that the fairy tale is real, but WHY can't it be?? This is wonderful. Wishing I could send it to someone. Sandra |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
And the mercy you were to recieve Would be hard for you to believe I am gone, you are set free Alone in your own misery Would serve him right! Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Little Miss Mercy Mistress, Show no mercy here. He does not deserve your forgiveness. He does not deserve *you* dear. Down on his knees, looking up at you, is where he should always be. Say 'so long' to the unworthy recipient, of the love of our friend Serenity. Great write! Love the power shown here. You go girl  ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
serenity This was so powerfully written and I enjoyed every word....wonderful! Take care....Sue Suetang |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Powerfully written...you go girl! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Have mercy. You wrote this so very well |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I felt the power of a real "woman" in this one, and like Janet Marie says, get a good supply of chapstick, and grab a net and go looking for those frogs, lol. Great poem, and theme. Reel beauty is only fin deep! |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
I love the force and flow of this poem. Great read! Show him NO mercy, Serenity! |
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