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I'd say goodbye
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I'd say goodbye |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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If I thought you could hear me I'd say goodbye but one has to be listening to hear a whisper There are other voices chattering familiar distractions and in my head the clatter . . . I learned another language then and now the ears why have they changed? They hear their own echoes of lives mislead and continue in the din I'd say goodbye if I thought you could hear me but my quiet road has diverged and I will no longer shout there are other voices to be heard . . . listen "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Krawdad....this is excellent....it spoke to my mind in very quiet whispers indeed... thank you for sharing this... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I'd say goodbye if I thought you could hear me but my quiet road has diverged and I will no longer shout Wow...whispered volumes! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
no kidding, this is an excellent way to write the parting of ways...enjoyed  |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Decaflame, JLR, ,jellybeans: I started this with a very specific situation in mind, but it didn't stay that way. Now I think it can be read on several levels. Thanks for your kind comments. Kraw' |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Krawdad, Very Impresive... really like this piece Thank You |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... one I wish I had written.... I Enjoyed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Krawdad, It can be read on several levels, enjoyed. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hmm...I really like this one sir. Sometimes though it's not the person can't hear you but they WON'T listen to you.... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
...and you call yourself an amatuer? Puh-lease! *smiles* Honestly, this was absolutely perfect. ~Tier |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Interesting place, this PIP site, where you can share your little bits of pain for others to enjoy. Zinsser, Cpat Hair, Seymour Tabin, Poet DeVine, & Tiersdin: Thanks for your kind comments, so glad that you enjoyed this. I enjoyed the writing. And Tiersdin, yes, still very much an amateur. |
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