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Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-07-24 03:55 PM

counting cotton threads

she lifts the sheets
and slides
in

remembering
when the cold
side was warmed
by a willing
wanting
man

and wonders
if
when
who

why...

the old music plays
golden tones
times gone by
remembering the feel

remembering the why

faded

on dresser's shelf
photographs
him on one side,
then, herself

remembering who

decades gone,
still only a breath
away

remembering when

somehow, someway
she senses
without trepidation
that there will one day
be an if

if so
she'll greet the
morrow with a smile
when

she lifts the sheets
and slides
in

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-07-24 03:59 PM

"the old music plays
golden tones
times gone by
remembering the feel"

this is so soft.....

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-24 04:09 PM

Sounds like at least a 300 count to me.... too soft to be anything less...

very nicely done

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

3 posted 2001-07-24 04:23 PM

well written, I wonder if it would be the same or would it be better.

Do not fear going forward slowly,
Fear only standing still.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-07-24 04:24 PM

sliding so slowly
tempting time tells totally
usual union

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth
http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/Interloper.htm

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

5 posted 2001-07-24 10:47 PM

nicely written and expressed, enjoyed your poem.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2001-07-25 12:51 PM

LadyInWhite~
Lovely expression~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

7 posted 2001-07-26 01:45 PM

Visual, sensual, contemplative... a very well guided unfolding of impressions.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2001-07-27 12:30 PM

Lady In White-
   I like this one very much..
   Nicely done..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

9 posted 2001-07-27 02:29 PM

I saw this title the other day and knew I had to read it, but got called away, am glad I found it today....great write...I too wait
*nods her head* great write

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