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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan 
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What I See When I look in the mirror I see myself behind myself I see two shadows The one is the me that others see The other is the me that I see They're not the same size So it's time to change The angle of the light Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Funny how we see things so differently about ourselves isn't it... Love the last two lines... |
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missiechrissie New Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 8Boston, Ma. USA |
So true- great poem! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Full of thought, depth, and Truth... I like: They're not the same size So it's time to change The angle of the light This shows me the possibility of change for the better by simply rearranging points of view, priorities, or actions. -MVS |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
A very honest poem...I like it. Especially the sagacious ending. ~Krista  |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Thanks Capt Hair, most people have a deflated view of themselfs. Thank you missiechrissie. Thank you Mark, changing all three were nessisary for me. Thanks Krista, I write a lot of self help stuff and my hopes are that others will find some of it useful. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This could be interpreted so many ways...great write! Much thought in such few words. |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
I loved it...ah if only we all could just "change" with the flick of a light switch. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Very nice, Shadow, and so very true,,good write and prospective..gentle smile |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, so true, and so well done! Sauni Sauni :) |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Jannette, you can. Just gotta find the right switch. Shadow this is extremely well written, um I'm not sure exactly what I can say about it really.. I did love reading it though, it gave me a very warm feeling, with the last lines.. if something isn't right, you know to change it.. Very powerful. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
gracious, I enjoyed this it reminds me of a book I purchased in a set back in the 70's, it showed pics of how the subject perceived herself and how she perceived others saw her and how others saw her, and the reality of what she really looked like, but then...that's all on the outside, anyway, isn't it |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I love the image that you've used here. . . the idea that there are not only two of us in the light, but that there are two of us in the shadow. . . and that they need to be in harmony to be fully seen and appreciated. . . thus, the change of the angle of light. . . but, I'm wondering if you you could have used another idea there. . . what light?? from how many degrees?? there's a lot more here. . . maybe for another poem??? great job. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Shadow...enjoyed the look in the mirror in this very interesting poem. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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