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The Last Kiss Goodbye
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The Last Kiss Goodbye |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
He held her tight... Others boarded single-file... And he knew he might Never more see her sweet smile... Their lips were locked; Their faces blurred; Their eyes tried to stay dry... Yet they both felt What Fate had dealt: The last kiss goodbye. She stared at him... Wanting so much to confide... But the Truth was grim So she kept the pain inside... Their lips were locked; Their faces blurred; Their eyes tried to stay dry... Yet they both felt What Fate had dealt: The last kiss goodbye. In her he saw His whole reality... In him she saw The end of her fantasy... Their lips were locked; Their faces blurred; Their eyes tried to stay dry... Yet they both felt What Fate had dealt: The last kiss goodbye. To let her go Was the hardest thing to do It was as though All that mattered was now through... Their lips were locked; Their faces blurred; Their eyes tried to stay dry... Yet they both felt What Fate had dealt: The last kiss goodbye. He turned around And not once did he look back... They both had found That their hearts had become black... Their lips were locked; Their faces blurred; Their eyes tried to stay dry... Yet they both felt What Fate had dealt: The last kiss goodbye. Though time went on, And they lived their lives apart, Not all was gone For remembered in their hearts: Their lips were locked; Their faces blurred; Their eyes tried to stay dry... Yet they both felt What Fate had dealt: The last kiss goodbye. (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yet another song sings itself.... enjoyed Mark |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Graci, Ron. This one is a catchy Irish/Celtic folk song for guitar and native/period instruments. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
OK.. can hear that in mind... could almost make it blue grass as well... but the two are related forms..so I guess that is no stretch |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, its entirely too sad to have a catchy celtic tune, to me. God, I can feel the tears in the eyes, and the melancholy is so strong. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
There's got to be something positive out of it, right Sandra? I'm glad that the emotions came across. Well, alrighty then: now that I've "gotten this chapter out of my system"... (yeah right) ...I can move on to truly current stuff with fresh thoughts, perspectives, and styles. Now's a good time to start a new series I'll call "TWENTY OR LESS..." and try my hand at "expressionistic minimalism"... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
God...... How freakin sad is this...Almost in tears... I can see it like a movie...Feel it like a song.... Geeeeze Well Done..... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Connie -- let's just say that you saw the trailer... the movie is still in "post-production". I'm glad that the imagery was vivid. Now: onward... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
A great song, written from the heart of a true poet. It brought out the emotional side of me.  "Parting is such sweet sorrow".. ummm I forget who said that...It sure makes for a great poem..... Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Flutterwings: thank you for your impressions. The only part about "Sweet Sorrow" with which I have a problem is the fact that it can leave a bitter aftertaste... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
very nice...it almost makes me want to try writing a song myself... mark, you are an inspiration  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes you don't even know its your last kiss...at least they knew...James |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Mark, So beautiful...Sometimes, nothing can be harder than "the last kiss goodbye".... Elise |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
faterider: that's an awesome compliment! Thank you, and I can only hope so, in some small way... You should absolutely try writing a song -- lyrics are poetry with another dimension -- music. Nothing I know of can express like a well-written song... Yeah, James -- that's the WORST! Elise -- yes; then, sometimes nothing is harder than the aftermath... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Vandana: Thank you. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
This is beauriful...I can hear music in my mind as I read this...thanks for sharing Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Cindi, thank you for your time and nice comments. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi is there any tips or websites you can direct me to regarding the mechanism of writing a song? |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
faterider: there have got to be tons of sites out there regarding songwriting, but I don't know of any particular ones off-hand since I've always intuitively written mine... I would suggest doing a simple search for "songwriting techniques" using GOOGLE and see what comes up. In terms of personal tips... that's a wide-open question whose answers will be based upon many things. Do you play any instruments already? If so, which ones? Piano and guitar are the two most immediate "natural" instruments which come to mind for songwriting, although you can legitimately not even play an instrument and still write an incredible song if you can sing... Number one test to "place" you would be to see if you can hum back a basic melody you hear on the radio... if you can do that fairly accurately and simply then you are 50% there. The rest becomes extremely subjective. I'd say that if you can write short and powerful poems ("simple" is usually "better", keeping in mind that lyrics often tend to be short and repetitive and that tight form in terms of rhythm and rhyme tend to lend themselves more to traditional songwriting, regardless of what style music), then you are already on your way. Define the style of music in which you are interested. One of the best things you could possibly do is literally "study" some of your favorite songs on a cd and analyze what's going on technically. If you follow along with the lyrics, you'll get a sense of when a verse happens, how often the chorus repeats, and when/if a bridge comes in... Repetition is one of the best tools there is, along with imitation when digesting something new. Once you get a sense of how that works, you will naturally expand away from "their" style and into your own... As far as I'm concerned, melody is everything in a song -- even more important than the words (HORROR, I know! But consider that infamous story of the Beatles' "Yesterday" where supposedly Paul started singing the words "scrambled eggs" TO THE MELODY! You get my point?). If, of course, the words are incredible and the music is catchy, then the song will probably be around for a very long time for many generations to enjoy, assuming it gets to see "the light of day", but the music business is a whole other topic of study and conversation. Check into The Songwriter's Guild Of America for some leads, as well... Good luck, and I hope this helps you a little... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Mark This was filled with so much love and longing...a beautiful piece of writing. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you Mark...i will print your advice out and i can't wait to jump on the bandwagon and have some fun  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Mark this was simply beautiful music to my eyes! I truly hope this is successful for you, if it is not already. I can almost hear this one, and if it sticks with me it is a winner! Kudos. ~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Sue... it was a very memorable moment, that's for sure. faterider: you're welcome. Keep me apprised of your progress. Sharon, thank you very much. It's still a sketch that I want to record on acoustic guitar. I haven't decided whether or not to fully arrange it in true Celtic form or simply leave it as a simple folk song... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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