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Masked Intruder
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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I breach an unhappy attempt, deftly. Desperate casualness a lone shield, latently smothering the vivid fear pulsating in the air, heartbeat by heartbeat. The Second’s Thought passes in which the cold creeps clammy against my skin, blackness overtakes my cerebral eye and my soul screams from my body in pain. The Second’s Thought passes as I regain composure lost in a moment’s weakness. A step is all that separates my life from an imperceptible doorway downward. Breath by breath, Heart’s Vociferation is drowned in incredible self-loathing and the stroke of protesting muscles drives me, spiraling downwards in pain. Again, I blink the Second’s thought away, drifting in indecision, floundering nearer the edge I indelibly fear, completely loathe. The Thought of the First bears down on me and mansuetude slips across my face in all-encompassing respledence. Heart’s Ellation thrusts final as the Thought of the First claims me. My soul screams in ecstasy. You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like the slow drifting of this to its conclusion...great ending by the way...and? I confess you made me look up mansuetude--GOOD WORD...thank you... I enjoyed this much, reminded me of self observance of mood, and I'm VEDDY happy to see you post again my friend. You've been a very good boy! So tell me, whaddya want for Christmas?   Enjoyed, Phil. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Very powerful. This is a heavy read for someone on her first cup of coffee  I'm coming back to read this tonight when I can appreciate it better. I too, have to go look up mansuetude. Very well writtenIf she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
Masked, Is that the way you dress normally when you're at home? I hope so! Always enjoy reading your poetry! |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Masked Intruder...I remember you from another poetry site..I think it might have been Scroll.org ? |
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MissNTrope Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 43 |
Shhhhhhh..... Don't tell anybody, Philip... Somebody you know and love had to look up 'mansuetude' too...  |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I had to read it twice but I'm here : ) and I too used the dictionary LOL I love the proverb... You can't wake someone who is pretending to sleep LOL Wonderful! ~Connie~ [This message has been edited by Zinsser (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Heya K! Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you liked. I figured since I was going to attempt a deputization, I might as well get back in the mood. You came mighty close on your interpretatin. And for Xmas? I still don't know. LOL Tracey, don't worry, it took me two cups of coffee just to write it. *wink* Marq, normally dress? I can't say I do that. LOL But, sure, I wear that around the house on occasion, just to keep my housemates on their toes. *grins* RosePetal...yes, I've been around. Definitely have been around. Missy N.T. I don't know what to say. I'm shocked, quite really. LOL Don't tell anyone, but I had to look up Mansuetude too. hehehe Zinnser, I'm glad you liked it. My college advisor used that quote for a while as her email signature. I'm sure she doesn't mind that I borrowed it. *grins* Mansuetude: noun - Gentleness of manner, mildness. That's too save everyone else the trouble. *grins* You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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