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My Reward
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My Reward |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
As I sit in my yard Looking out at the rustic view of the valley below I debate whether or not to open the card It is the one thing that I still have to hold on to The world out there is always spinning faster and faster But life on this mountain of mine is slow The morning sun comes up and puts on a color show done by the master Just my lazy dog and I gets to see the show The birds in flight sound like angels joyously crying When the sun rise brings a new day It all comes together and makes life worth trying The sunshine helps keep the blues away Thoughts of you and the life we had together Come to me every night and smudge the senses Trying to turn my world dark with stormy weather But I am safe behind my defenses For the love we had lives forever For now you are with the Lord I know that one day soon we will be once again together For in due time I shall have my reward Alan aka Icyheart Sept. 02, 2001 |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Alan, this left me speechless. Haunting, moving. Anything I could say here just pales in comparision to what you have just written. In due time you shall have your reward Tracey If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Thoughts of you and the life we had together Come to me every night and smudge the senses Trying to turn my world dark with stormy weather But I am safe behind my defenses For the love we had lives forever For now you are with the Lord I know that one day soon we will be once again together For in due time I shall have my reward =========================================== awesome writing my friend"smudge the senses" very cool line.. much enjoyed the story and the imagery in this one.. hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Thank you Ladies..I am glad you liked it. I wrote it in response to a challenge.. alan |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Alan This was so beautiful yet so very sad. The image you portrayed was wonderful. Take care....Sue Suetang |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Alan, if you wrote this in response to a challenge, then I say you won hands down  Tracey If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Thank you Sue... Tracey...as a matter of fact I lost to a better poem even in my opinion. thanks for your sweet reply alan |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Alan, We all have been "rewarded" just by reading your poem. Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This is beautiful and so poignant! A masterful job! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Nightshade...thank you for your gracious remarks Trillium...I am glad you liked it..thank you |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I know these feelings well, Alan. Apreciating one beauty while missing another. Thanks Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
May the winds of love carry this message to the one who is no doubt missing you too |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Alan...this is just splendid |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thoughts of you and the life we had together Come to me every night and smudge the senses Trying to turn my world dark with stormy weather But I am safe behind my defenses For the love we had lives forever For now you are with the Lord I know that one day soon we will be once again together For in due time I shall have my reward ================================ wonderful blending of imagery and emotion in this bittersweet beauty. cadence kissed rhyme flow... this was a pleasure to read aloud. Well done poet sir jm A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
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