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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
Give me the chance to show you the reality you could never dream to prove my love is unlike any that you have ever seen. Give to me your hand then lend to me your love I'll fly you to the heavens shroud in the clouds above I'll love you till forever stops and even after then. Here’s where the hurting stops and eternal bliss begins. Place your heart in my hands I'll never let it fall A constant in the chaos, For you I'd give my all There’s no wish you could ever make, There’s no fantasy so divine that it Could bring into your life, what you’ve Brought into mine. I'll cherish every kiss I'll devote my life to you I'll love you like no other I'll be your dream come true. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Who could ask for more than this? Lovely write and sentiments. Best of luck to you! All writing comes |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
What an exquisite piece of writing you have penned, full of romance and longing. I loved every word. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
What a beautiful promise of love! You have definitely put yout heart into your words  I would give anything to have someone make this "dream come true" for me. Thanks for sharing,- Jeff |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll love you till forever stops and even after then. Here’s where the hurting stops and eternal bliss begins. Place your heart in my hands I'll never let it fall A constant in the chaos, For you I'd give my all There’s no wish you could ever make, There’s no fantasy so divine that it Could bring into your life, what you’ve Brought into mine. =========================== this is so beautiful in its devotion and sincerety and wonderful in its rhyme and cadence flow. I held a love like this once...and it was indeed divine.. very lovely writing poetess innocence When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
powerful and tender promises all rolled in together sweet write |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
May he understand the honor you bestow upon him; may he cherish this privilege; may these feelings never go away; and may they be always mutual. A lovely message, Jamie. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent. . . I loved the messages in this one. . . flowing pretty good. . . you might want to take a look at some of the rhymes and line breaks that you're using. . . but, I love the feelings. . . you write romance. . . and I'm there. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
pure_innocence- What lovely sentiment you've penned.. A love like this is a wonderful thing. Nicely done.. ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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mpt Junior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 32australia |
amazingly wirtten! probably the best piece of love poetry i have ever read, well done! |
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FaeryKynn Junior Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 10Sanatoga, PA, USA |
a beautiful declaration of love, i hope the person it's intended for loves it every bit as much as the rest of us have.... If our fingers touch and hearts collide... I'll be a moonsbreath by your side |
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