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Beyond The Night
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Beyond The Night |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
A single hand reaching towards the light, Through the dark, beyond the night, Do you love as I love, do you fear what it is I fear, Can you see what I see, do you hear what it is I hear, The colors of my fantasy, the whispers of my dreams, The sunlight shining down, in liquid golden beams, The shadow of eternity, the rhythm of my heart, The promise of forever, that this is just the start, Reach beyond all space and time so that you might finally fly, Do you taste the moonlight, did you touch the velvet sky, Do you see the rainbow, can you feel the heat, Do you smell the rain, as it falls upon your feet, Do you hear the lullaby, a child sweetly laughing, Do you feel the presence of eternity, of true love ever lasting, Whatever this is I feel, the pulling deep inside, It’s a sensation I can’t deny, a force that won’t subside, I don’t know what it is, that you’ve done to me, Can’t express in words how your love has set me free, So if you ever leave, would you please take me with you, Cause if you’re ever lonely I want to be lonely too, Can’t imagine living, without your hand to hold, It’s only in your arms that I can bear the thought of growing old, Need your touch each and every day that I walk this earth, I’ll always go the distance cause I know just what your worth, As night falls a warm breeze slips lazily through my hair, I pull you a little closer let you know how much I care, Let the sunlight dance upon your skin, Let my kiss show you of this love I hold within, Your voice lingers on the air and fades into the night, The rest the world has slipped away and all is finally right, My life, my love now ‘tis only you and I, Left alone beyond the night to watch as time slips by. May Today there be peace within you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, the whole world is indeed a crystal springing forth refracted light when love hangs around... enjoyed! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The colors of my fantasy, the whispers of my dreams, The sunlight shining down, in liquid golden beams, The shadow of eternity, the rhythm of my heart, The promise of forever, that this is just the start, Reach beyond all space and time so that you might finally fly, Do you taste the moonlight, did you touch the velvet sky, Do you see the rainbow, can you feel the heat, Do you smell the rain, as it falls upon your feet, Do you hear the lullaby, a child sweetly laughing, Do you feel the presence of eternity, of true love ever lasting, Whatever this is I feel, the pulling deep inside, It’s a sensation I can’t deny, a force that won’t subside, I don’t know what it is, that you’ve done to me, Can’t express in words how your love has set me free, So if you ever leave, would you please take me with you, Cause if you’re ever lonely I want to be lonely too, ========================= this is outstanding... superb writing...perfect rhyme pattern and cadence, wonderful employ of imagery and elements of nature to express the emotions... and the devotion of emotion is lovely excellent poetic phrasing as well. An impressive level of inspire and writing. Welcome to poetry land... so nice to have you here with us... I look forward to more of your talented work. take care jm Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The power of Love and Devotion... Your sentiments are well expressed and hopefully equally well received. And you doubt your talent?? Write, read, write, ponder, write, live, write, love, write... it's all an evolution of being, where the sharing of observations, contemplations, experiences, and emotions lead us to be more sensitive and write better... I enjoyed. (How could I forget to bid you welcome to this "wonderous land whose boundaries are that of imagination"...? I look forward to more of your works.) -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." "Everyone can hear; few can listen." [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
Thank you guys so very much for your replies. They mean the world to me, I have been critized all through school about my writing recieving little encouragement beyond my mother. So hearing words like that inspire to conquer the world with my pen, and beleive whole-heartedly that I will succeed. Your words hit home in my heart, thank you, you'll never know how much it means to me. May Today there be peace within you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading your poem...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I think this was refreshingly honest and sincere. Keep it up! "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Some superbly fine lines within this piece. Lovely, love with exuberance and tenderness. |
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