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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

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0 posted 2001-08-14 11:27 PM

I think I know that raindrop,
it's fallen here before,
reborn on a mountaintop
then spring it waited for.

Helped to grow a bumper crop
until its Aunt Downpour
coaxed it with a lolliplop
to join a rivers roar.

Briefly made a bucket stop,
a labor pooled detour,
briskly jerked up by a mop
then through the kitchen door.

Then by hand sponged, it was sopped
and squeezed to pail once more,
back to river it was dropped
continuing its tour.

It passed the fishing pro shop,
it saw the sandy shore,
did a silent belly flop
deep down to oceans floor.

It rose astride an airdrop
what seemed forevermore,
broke seas surface, didn't stop
drawn to clouds reservoir.

It came to rest over top
my head outside a store
and there it chose to kerplop,
old friends we don't ignore.

inot2B
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since 2000-09-18

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Arkansas

1 posted 2001-08-14 11:48 PM

I hope your friend drops by my house down here in South Texas. Enjoyed very much!

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

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Oregon

2 posted 2001-08-15 01:11 AM

really enjoyed this, a grand way to tell the water cycle and a very cute ending

might be good placed in a children's non-fiction science reader with super illustrations

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-08-15 01:17 AM

RSWells~
I just LOVE this~

'I think I know that raindrop,
it's fallen here before,
reborn on a mountaintop
then spring it waited for.'

Wonderfully detailed imagery~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

4 posted 2001-08-15 06:25 AM

Very enjoyable piece indeed....wonderful write
~HUGS~ Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

shadow of the fall
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since 2001-08-13

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Indiana

5 posted 2001-08-15 06:32 AM

Made me think of rain in a whole different way!

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

6 posted 2001-08-15 08:34 AM

WONDERFUL!
That's all I can say
Liz

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2001-08-15 08:37 AM

The cyclic value of a raindrop goes unheeded till most needed...

well done Sir...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2001-08-15 08:41 AM

RSWells,
Just adding one more rain drop of praise for your poem.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

9 posted 2001-08-15 08:56 AM

RS... enjoyed this a great deal... nicely done!

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

10 posted 2001-08-15 08:39 PM

Wonderous tale of a rain drop. I agree with VAS. I could picture it coming to life the whole verse. Now everytime it rains, I'll remember this.
Sincerely,
Regina

Martie

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California

11 posted 2001-08-15 10:17 PM

RS--the first poem I ever wrote was when I was five...(I still have it) and it was about the cycle of rain. This just made me smile! Thank you!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

12 posted 2001-08-15 10:39 PM

Well if you lived in Vancouver you would not like this friend much as here we don't grow old we just rust from the amount of rain - well done Richard, and a very, very cute ending to this poem.

If you have but one true friend when you die you were truly blessed
~* Mysteria *~

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