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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

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Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2001-07-13 08:41 PM

Mute Torment

Sunshine in a box
unleashes mind's eye torment
prison bleeds stigma
dead heart feasts upon itself
for miracles molested
~
The scream of silence
enslaves punctured dreams of soul
depression slits throat
trapped by wall's haunting hell of
the sound of no sound

By Melissa P. Monette

Flutterwings
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 288
Maine

1 posted 2001-07-13 08:54 PM

Hi! Melissa,

I'm new to this forum... but, I have to let you know that I really enjoy this piece. Deep, dark and soul searching. It cries for the breath of fresh air. It bellows for freedom. Kudos!

Love and peace ((~.~))

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-07-13 08:57 PM

This makes me think of the victims of the holocaust. Very powerful, indeed.

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

3 posted 2001-07-13 09:54 PM

Certainly hellish, but too a breakthrough.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2001-07-13 09:57 PM

Melissa~

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

mirror man
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since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

5 posted 2001-07-13 10:58 PM

Yes, this is good. Interesting picture; reminds me of Goya.

cpalmer
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since 2001-06-26

Posts 977
Phoenix, Az

6 posted 2001-07-14 08:42 AM

Melissa,
I see this as a mute trying to get out of his/her own body...enjoyed...Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-07-14 11:09 AM

dark Melissa. . . very dark indeed. . .

you've shown the depth of this feeling very well my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

walker
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since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

8 posted 2001-07-14 07:43 PM

Sad message in a great poem.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2001-07-14 07:54 PM

Melissa-
   very powerful write..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

10 posted 2001-07-14 08:28 PM

I wish I didn't relate to this, but God, I do.....

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

11 posted 2001-08-01 10:13 PM

Thank you all, and Kathleen, I'm sorry that you relate~

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

12 posted 2001-08-03 04:45 PM

Very potent, Melissa... I especially liked the 2nd half -- some powerful imagery and descriptions there.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

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