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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-08-07 01:01 AM



Shadow Harp
Virginia Salter

shadow-harp
on patio floor
silently strums
melancholy into my heart,
my soul

yet
shadow-ferns
trim this sunlit surface
framing the light
that seeks to illumine my being,
my countenance

oh that I
may take it in
make use of its awesome tenderness
its seeking to ungray
the very inner core of my heart

shadow-legs
stretch across the expanse
in slender stripes
giving contrast
giving dark and light
urging me to stand
in the light of morning


© August 23.  2000

© Copyright 2001 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
rwood
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
1 posted 2001-08-07 07:29 AM


A soft imaginative verse. I enjoyed this very much.
Sincerely,
Regina

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2001-08-07 08:11 AM


Very lovely, V.
Sandra

Faust
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 7

3 posted 2001-08-07 06:42 PM


I like this.
I think you could find a better word or term than "ungray" though.  Perhaps "colour" or "uncover"?? Just suggestions.

Enjoyed.

cpalmer
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since 2001-06-26
Posts 977
Phoenix, Az
4 posted 2001-08-08 08:39 AM


I can just see the imagery in this one! It's beautiful Virginia!
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
5 posted 2001-08-08 11:58 AM


Thank you all!  Thanks for the change of word suggestion, but neither conveys quite what I want to say.


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