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samt
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 52
Brisbane

0 posted 2001-08-22 08:52 PM

Feelings running through my body
like a fish wonders the sea
chemicals I cannot control
which stray in-between me
I want to be with my Lover
her beauty I simply see
but She is with another
oh why can't we be
feelings rushing around me
like this pretty pink sky
I can't help think about
if we'll sail round time
I keep on thinking
bout your precious face
how you glowed in the dark
or your sexy black lace
how I wish you were here
so I could wrap mine arms round
your beautiful sensualness
we could be so abound
if only you would see
thy pure loving heart
you would feel so strong
we could never break apart

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

1 posted 2001-08-22 09:45 PM

Interesting poem. A heartfelt expression of your feelings.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-08-22 09:53 PM

Hmm- I liked this one alot.
So sweet...yet bumming because it's a poem written while in LONGING for someone...That always bites. The feelings I mean...hehe not the poem.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

3 posted 2001-08-22 09:56 PM

Your poem is very interesting but also sweet keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

samt
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 52
Brisbane

4 posted 2001-08-22 10:28 PM

Thanks for reading
and for your replies

Sambo

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

5 posted 2001-08-22 10:51 PM

Believe me, I know how you feel in this poem, I am going thru something like this RIGHT now, as some of my work expresses.  I hope everything works out.

Well anyway, onto the poem.  Hmm..... what can I say?  I can't think of any REAL problems with it, hell, I liked it alot.  Keep up the good work.

                   -Rich

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

samt
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 52
Brisbane

6 posted 2001-08-22 11:16 PM

lol, thanks heaps
It really means more than you all think

sambo

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-08-24 11:08 AM

"feelings rushing around me
like this pretty pink sky
I can't help think about
if we'll sail round time"
I love that... "sail around time". I like this one... very sad. The tone sounds very familiar. Nicely done.. I really enjoyed this one. Your writing style is unique, and always enjoyable to read.

This is certainly no exception.
Good work.

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

samt
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 52
Brisbane

8 posted 2001-09-02 10:31 PM

Thank you Marie, That means a lot.
I just hop She sees that too.

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