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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
the sandman seems to have forgotten his magickal dust this night silken pillows cannot seem to calm the restlessness you have inspired winding free from it's delicate grasp is the intoxicating fragrance of your skin it seems it's not the only thing holding onto the fever of a fading memory i wonder as to where you have gone and whom this night finds in your arms salty tears trail down my cheek wishing the sandman wasn't so careless even though deep down i know my dreams will be filled with your smile "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Excellent job |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great poem I loved it keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
That's a really nice post. I don't know what it was about this one but I really liked it. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hmm..I liked this. How you are mad at the sandman for being careless and making you have to stay awake and think of these things... And then the ending was very well thought out. Much liked by me! hope to see much more! You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a terrific poem...honestly i truely enjoyed it!! great job here hun  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"winding free from it's delicate grasp is the intoxicating fragrance of your skin" I LOVE that stanza. This is a very well written poem... it's very mysterious, and leaves the reader wondering who the sandman is, and why you're angry. Mysterious is always good! Nicely done, I really enjoyed this one. The format of the poem was always well done. It was formatted, but free style. Nice work! Hope to see more soon  --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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