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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677
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I havents posted a poem here in a while, so I figured I would post this. Its an oldie, but I have major writers block, so I figured this would be a good time to post some oldies. I hope ya like it all the same! Sitting here On the edge Waiting for something That never comes A helping hand A friendly smile Reassuring words To ease the pain Why do these things Never come? Why am I left here All alone? Sitting here On this ledge *If you can't stand for something, you'll fall for anything.* [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 08-26-2001).] |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
i liked this poem a lot Why am I left here All alone? Standing here On this ledge tis my favorite part  cant wait to see more!You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
look around you, we are all lined up next to you  ......wow this is really good.... |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
aww i agree with sea...look at us here HT!!!  ....thanks for sharing "Kiss my Starfish! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is pretty good. I can tell it's an oldie only because you've improved so much since this. The only thing I noticed was, you began the poem with you sitting, and then ended it the same, only you say you're standing. That confused me. I think you should stay sitting or standing... it sounds like a typo. Anyways, need someone to talk to? Look around. That's what PIP's for. Good work.--Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Thanks for noticing that Marie. I dont know how I missed that. It does seem kinda weird, but its too late to change it. Oh well. |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
nice job, really great read  Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought you did a wonderful job here. I loved how meaningful and short it was. Great job.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Nice write HT, new or old..who cares. HeHe Hope you get over writers block soon though! And I know how ya feel, just needing reassuring words to ease the pain... Thanks for the read. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Open your eyes and you'll see that it is there hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great poem I loved it keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah yes. We are all here just looking down going, "What is the point and what am I doing here?!" I do like the piece, though. It's short but gets to the point in a somewhat delicate process....if that made ANY sense.  Thanks for the read. ~AF~ "Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I love looking back on old poems N e way this one was really good...i enjoyed it and i think it had a lot of hidden meaning in it..or atleast thats what i saw Nice job! |
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