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Melancholy Moonlight.
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Melancholy Moonlight. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Melancholy moonlight Shines a melancholy moon tonight, Blue, it’s slowly waning light, A thousand tear drops light the sky, Stars from heaven from her blue eye, Giant whispers float down stream, Sailing in my perfect dream, Playful streaming wisps of hair, Falling, an angel hears my prayer, As lightning tears my soul apart, A delicate thunder beats my heart, An angel mends my inner aching, In my dreams and in my waking, On the wind glides her soft, sweet breath, Her beauty shines through tragic death, And in her eyes lies all her love, Stolen and taken up high above. From this melancholy moon tonight, Shines a golden halo of light, Angel from heaven protects our way, And guides me to another day. Hey I ain't posted in ages so be gentle with me...  Zu " In childhood we live under the brightness of immortality - heaven is as near and as actual as the seaside"- Graham Greene " Ministry of Fear |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i liked this one a lot..actually i liked it a lot LOT..like heaps...it was really serene and flowed very peacefully in my head. you did well with this one too andrew i enjoyed it heaps..i read it twice over cuz i liked it a lot. you write beautifully and this one is certainly a good piece from you. nice to see you posting again  period pain is HELL! |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Playful streaming wisps of hair, Falling, an angel hears my prayer, Wow~! this was such a moving piece I really loved the emotions used in this ALLIE |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thanx for the replies much appreciated |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
oh! i really loved this one too...it was great. good job cant wait to see more zu  You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Zu, this is such a beautiful piece. I am extremely impressed. The flow of this was really nice, and it helped me to picture the moonlight...really smooth. The imagery was incredible. Quite light, and your personifications matched it too. A very peaceful poem, indeed. One of the best I've read so far. Till later! Glad to see you posting again too!  -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
"Giant whispers float down stream, Sailing in my perfect dream, Playful streaming wisps of hair, Falling, an angel hears my prayer," I really enjoyed these lines. I dont know why, so dont ask. Something about them just really appealed to my poetic senses. Hmmm... |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
Andrew, I really love your poetry...you are one of the best writers I know. I love this poem..I hope you don't mind but it's another of your poems that I'm going to print up and stick it up in my room. I love you!!I LOVE ZU, hey Albie, Cody, Allan, Carly, Cherish, Lizzy, Kris, *HUGS JAVI*, Tamma, Acire, and Branden. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wowsers.. "As lightning tears my soul apart, A delicate thunder beats my heart, An angel mends my inner aching, In my dreams and in my waking," I LOVED that stanza. Awesome flow throughout the piece. The imagery, and the language sounds very professional. I am very impressed, Mr. Zu Awesome work!--Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
omg, i've always loved ur poems but this just adds on 2 the list of ever growing favs. i really liked this one. very thought provoking...thanks 4 the read.  death is certain, life is not |
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