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fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-08-18 12:27 PM

A Man Can

A man can catch a
fading star in his eye
And set it loose with
Twist of tongue(twist of lime)
For a fellow dreamer
drinking life between bites
dried salt on pretzels

A young man can cry over
a fading star not fading
anymore, within a bittersweet
galaxy a young man waits
for the next fading star
to pass him over
and over

A Jesus of the carnival
will laugh about our
fading star, he's seen so many
in the lifetimes he's lives in
with his brothers, sisters, mothers, fathers
thieves, whores, liars, friends and apostles
all who are the fading stars (their own)

     it's a blink in the eye to capture
     an ownership of a forgotten star

But who really cares about someone else's star?

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

1 posted 2001-08-18 01:26 AM

dang...you make it hard for me to reply everytime b/c everytime i'm at a loss for words (and i'm not just bulls*****g you either) good job once again...this is actually one of my favorites from you!

me

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

2 posted 2001-08-18 03:31 AM

Great poem I really love it keep up the great work!
Lauren

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-08-20 11:49 PM

Wow, that last line hit me hard. I really liked this one, Foz. Very thought provoking piece... I read through it a few times, and found myself having to sit back and think about it. Nice work.. I really enjoyed it. Looking forward to the next... keep posting!

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2001-08-21 12:33 PM

But who really cares about someone else's star?

i agree with marie this one really made me sit back and think about it a few times..i like it a lot- you write about faith a lot..well ive seen examples of it in your work and its a great thing you're able to write it well! thanks for sharing

"Kiss my Starfish!
My chocolate Starfish punk!"
-'Hot dog'
Limp Bizket

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-08-22 06:33 PM

"it's a blink in the eye to capture
an ownership of a forgotten star

But who really cares about someone else's star?"
LOVEd the last line as well- Wow! Very awesome write here. MORE!!!! NOW!!!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-08-24 11:55 PM

Awesome job here! Wow, you just amaze me with the talent you possess. Awesome work! I am amazed. Well done here. Another poem to admire every aspect about it.......always gets me thinkin "how does he do it?"

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

7 posted 2001-08-25 02:26 PM

this was great keep it up

Only darkness falls on those without souls

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