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I Never Knew
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA 
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-=I Never Knew=- I never knew such music Until you spoke my name. I never knew such a life Until you made me go insane. I never knew such rapture Until we shared a kiss. I never knew my heart Until you gave it bliss. I never knew such warmth Until you held me close. I never knew such satisfaction Until you left your heart exposed. I never knew such happiness Until we met that day. And I never knew true emptiness Until the day you went away... "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is so good... damn you why u gotta be so talented hahaha  GREAT work!!Valerie "...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva |
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The Exile Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 52Ontario, Canada |
I like your poem and what it expressed, truly the feeling of first love is always sweetest!! I also liked the way your rhymes worked and... although the repetition of the first few words in each line seemed a little rigid to me, still a nice piece of work regardless!! Keep it up![This message has been edited by The Exile (edited 08-15-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Oh! this one goes right into my library. I love this, I feel this so much more than you could ever know wow..... |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was great. nice feelings, very straightforward. Regina |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
I loved this, i could relate entirely to this, great job It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Nice write...Sara. So sweet...and then the ending just made it all sad. The font was a nice touch... You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow im feeling this, my boyfriend just left me for college  it sucks, but neways, good poem *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nice use of the HTML. Gave it a nice touch. I enjoyed this... very sad, and something I'm sure MANY of us can connect with. I liked the flow and rhyme througout. It's not broken once, and that's something to be proud of! Heh. Nice work, Sara. --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is really sad but you express your emotions very well.I hope things get be6ter for you and keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now this is really ana mazing read simple words that mean so much awesome work Sara, keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is awesome! I really liked this one. It is so filled with pain. I can truly relate to this one in every way.Can't believe I didn't see it until now. In the library. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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