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Ree Ree
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0 posted 2001-06-28 10:00 PM




I wish life was the way it was meant to be

I wish everyone had someone to love

I wish everyone understood how to be nice and
that it makes people fell nice when your nice

I wish no one got laughed at for being differant

I wish people were encouraged to be differant

I wish you could walk on the streets of down
town at night and not worry or be affraid

I wish no one had to experiance fear

I wish everyone cared about everyone

I wish everyone could see what hurt they could cause
before they cause it so they could
realize what they were doing and stop

I wish we lived in a world where it was ok to cry

I wish we didn't have to cry

I wish we could remember to laugh everyday

I wish people said nice things simply to say nice things

I wish people never had to experiance war or hate

I wish people didn't gossip

I wish no one cared what everyone else thought

I wish everyone let everyone be themselves

I wish everyone excepted everyone for who they wanted to be

I wish everyone respected themselves

I wish everyone had someone to tell them what was good about them
instead of what was bad

I wish no one had to have nightmares

I wish no one took their own life or had a reason to

I wish no one took anyone elses life

I wish there was no such things as revenge

I wish there was no reason for it

I wish everyone could be nice to people,
even if those people weren't so nice to them

I wish everyone grew up with a loving family

I wish parents didn't sometimes forget that they were parents

I wish siblings were always companions

I wish best freinds stayed best friends

I wish relationships always worked out

I wish enemies could find a way to become friends

I wish no one had enemies

I wish people always found their "soul mate"

I wish first loves could be forever loves

I wish simple conversations could brighten everyone's day

I wish it really was the simple things

I wish every kid could have a pet

I wish everyone looked like what they were on the inside

I wish everyone realized the consequence before the action

I wish we could understand love

BUT

Maybe the misunderstanding is what makes it love

Maybe existance isn't existing with out a struggle

Maybe realtionships aren't relationships without the obstacles
that must be overcome

Maybe people aren't people without trials and tribulations

Maybe humans aren't humans without misunderstanding
and miscommunication

Maybe good isn't good without bad

Maybe life just isn't life without a little bit of living

Maybe life isn't what it's suppose to be
without the things we wish it wasn't


© Copyright 2001 maria - All Rights Reserved
TopGunLauren
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1 posted 2001-06-28 10:09 PM


This has to be the best poem I have ever read on here.I know a lot of people who spend their whole lifes wishing all those things but by wishing all that, they are missing out on a lot of good things.Because they live in fear and regret everything they do that doesn't turn out perfectly.So I totally understand this poem and keep up the great work!
  LAuren

scout
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2 posted 2001-06-28 10:15 PM


I love the ending of this, i can tell you rushed through it with all the misspellings!  (slow down, enjoy life!)  

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

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3 posted 2001-06-29 12:49 PM


wow!...so many emotions in this one...i can relate to all that we want and need in this corrupted world...i wish also all the things you have written...very inspring message for otehrs should consider and try to make this world a better place...thabnsk for the share ...bye..

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4 posted 2001-06-29 03:20 AM


You've done an incredible job with this.  The longing you've expressed nearly brought tears to my eyes.  You've also put this together so emotionally to express your meaning.  The lines about soulmates and love were especially potent.  You've really accomplished a lot in these few lines of poetry.  "I wish first loves could be forever loves" ...that is beatiful and touching.  Your realization/finalie with the maybes was a wonderful way to complete the poem.  The only qualms i have are your spelling, which did distract me a bit, and i also have a suggestion...probably not worth considering, but i think it would make the poem more personal to say "i" instead of "everyone" or "no one"...it would have a greater impact, i think.  Also, maybe forming more defined stanzas would give it greater flow or theme.  Ehhh, i don't know.  I can't compliment you enough on this.  Definetly library material.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

anonymousfemale
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5 posted 2001-06-29 08:32 AM


Holy Moly!!! *stands up clapping her hands off*

Please bow and take these roses for you have written a masterpiece! These thoughts are so simple that you never actually realise until someone, like yourself, puts them into a poem for all to read. Totally amazing.

Not only does it rock, it is going in my library.  

~AF~

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6 posted 2001-06-29 09:50 AM


this is simply amazing  
Danielle
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7 posted 2001-06-29 11:02 AM


Geez Maria, look, one day of posting and you have more replies then alomost all of mine put together...lol. Keep up the good work! Love ya.
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8 posted 2001-06-29 12:00 PM


This was great.  It is the first of yours that I have read, and I love it.  Thanks for bringing your poetry here!  I loved the message in this one!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

TopGunLauren
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9 posted 2001-06-29 02:31 PM


This is a really good poem so I'm bumping it up so more peopl can read it.
  Lauren

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10 posted 2001-06-29 04:18 PM


That last line REALLY confused me, can you explain it?  
Anyhow, welcome to passions, I enjoyed this poem a lot.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ree Ree
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11 posted 2001-06-29 09:06 PM


the last line::: maybe life isn't what it's suppose to be with out the things we wish it wasn't:: it means that eve n though we hate going through hard time and difficult situations, life wouldn't really be life if we didn't have those things, because it's the good and bad things that make up life and stuff like that. Atleast that's what i think it means, u could interperet it however it seems best to u.
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12 posted 2001-07-01 04:21 PM


You are right, it's all the bad that make us realize the good.  Excellent write Ree Ree.  I'm very impressed, and I'd like to see more of your work in the near future.  Thanks foir sharing.

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