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Estás mi todo(Dopey help!)
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Estás mi todo(Dopey help!) |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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Estás mi todo Te amo más que el sol, más que la luna, más que el mar, más que el mundo, Estás mi todo Quizás para siempre Si tú dices Pero solamente si. -This is gramatically incorrect. I wrote it in a minute or two, just so I could get used to thinking Spanish and poetry at the same time again. Dopey, please correct my grammar(always have been horrible at it). Anyway, someone knows this is for them, and they also know they can translate with their Spanish dictionary they're about to throw away becuase I won't help them. "And you're my obsession I love you to the bones And Ana wrecks your life Like an anorexia life" - "Ana's Song", Silverchair Craig, "yo no puedo mas sin ti" [This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 08-12-2001).] |
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California Rockstar Junior Member
since 2001-08-09
Posts 13State of Confusion |
whether it is grammatically sound or not, the point comes through very well. I really dig it. It sounds alot like my attempts at Spanish poetry. I find it difficult to think in another language and try to be poetic at the same time. Good Job! If practice makes perfect, but noboy's perfect, why bother? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Heh.. welp, if I knew a lick of Spanish, I could help you out... or even better, I could read it! Unfortunately, my Spanish vocabulary consists of one word... Adios. Haha, so nicely done, even though I couldn't read it  Adios!   --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was really sweet.....but ESTAS should be ERES and the last two lines dont much make sense to me. I mean, I know what it means but it doesn't really mean anything. "si tu dices pero solamente si" if you tell but only yes that doesn't really make sense..... what are you trying to say? anyhow, nice poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
 ..i dont know any spanish!!!but do you think we could have a translation Isa? S |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
 if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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