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The Black Widow |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
She'll come whether you want her or not, luring you into her arms, seeking your vision to meet with her priceless eyes. Taking you into a dream, kissing and accepting you, with her stunning charms. You want her, you need her, and she knows it. ^*~*^ But another story unfolds, was it all just a game? Her cold exterior exludes you from her ivasive soul. Sending you on your way, with only a pain in your heart. You want her, you need her, and she knows it. "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
oh wow i really liked this one a lot. i think this was great. yah great work here. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
This was GREAT, i loved it  ~Tamma "A friend's shoulder makes a |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. this really had a darker sense to it than the poems I usually see you posting. This was really well written... I liked the way you ended both the stanzas the same way, but I think you could add on to this. Expand it a little, and end a different way. Adds more power to the ending that way. The poem really intrigued me.. This is another one that struck me as mysterious in many ways. The way you leave the reader in the dark about the subject topic was clever. I'm curious to know what this was is about. Nicely done, Kim. There's a lot that can be read in this poem. I hope all is well.. it sounds like you might be having a hard time, and I certainly hope that's not the case.  Nice work!--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Delirious_Smurf Member
since 2001-08-08
Posts 90Nothingness,P.R. |
That was really good, I liked! I like how you need her and she knows it..thats good...it shows a cruel side to it  Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Incredible! Wow! I LOVE this! Such a horrible, but typical situation. What a bad lil girl. You wrote this very well. One of my more favs from you. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
interesting title but well fitted, great poem it was really enjoyable to read Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
quiet dark...i like that though. very cold and disant. great work! Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really enjoyed the ending. I thought you had some really awesome thoughts in this one. Well written!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Awwwwww thanks everyone! I chose the title The Black Widow because "A Black Widow" is a specie of female spider which makes love to its mate and then eats it, it is known for being cunning and enticing the male spiders and then turning on them! Thanks for being concerned Marie but all is well!! Thankyou for caring, I'm grateful! *hugs you all* ^*~Kicking Kim~*^  "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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