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Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

0 posted 2001-08-08 03:34 PM

Well this is the first poem I post in here

!
I'm not Ms. Poetry but I do enjoy writting so hey I hope you enjoy reading.:

Once in a past not yet forgotten,
once in a time not so long ago.
I saw a rocket make its way to the moon
and I said to myself " Maybe I can go!"
For what if the moon is really a dream?
And maybe,just maybe,it's been waiting for me.
I put on my spacesuit
and off I wen.t
Safe was the thought
of a much better place.
Cuz maybe the day was always bright
and wishful stars lit up the night.
And maybe in my honor the ocean would wave.
And always in my heart I'd have my faith.
Oh, to think no more looking down.
Oh, to smile and never frown.
It was all very exciting.
I was almost there.
Expectations were high
I was so prepared.
I heard the rocket land
as I stood beside the door
awaiting this place
I had dreamt about before.
The door finally opened
and I quickly stepped outside.
I took of my helmet
and to my surprise
I hadn't gone anywhere.
Maybe we took a wrong turn.
It took me a while to figure it out
but after it all I was quite satisfied.
I remember seeing another rocket that year,
I saw as it made it's way to the moon.
I smiled and turned away
for now my mind was clear.
The moon didn't hold what I had so wished for,
the moon wasn't my true dream
It wasn't the place were your heart was filled
with the satisfaction of all you have fulfilled.
It wasnt full of happiness, nor magic, nor love.
It wasn't at all what I had thought.
But when I truly looked deep down
I realized that Earth was were all that is found.

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-08-08 04:04 PM

Hey Laura! Oh I'm so glad you started posting! HeHe, I don't even think I knew that you wrote poetry. (Then again, I think it's a rule that all Javi's friend write and listen to SP- So I should've guessed. LOL) ANYWAY! I liked this alot! The meaning behind it was awesome. One we all need to figure out. You wrote this very well.I'm impressed. I enjoyed it bunches upon bunches! And by god- I want to see MORE! NOW! HeHe. Off I go! Buh Bye girlie.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 08-08-2001).]

Crash&Burn
Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

2 posted 2001-08-08 04:06 PM

first of all WELCOME TO PASSIONS LAURA!!
I'm glad you decided to join the community smurfy, lol. anyways to your poem, I'm speechless lol, I wish my first post was like that! I really liked your poem because it has a basic idea being discribed in it; how us as human beings are never satisfied and we always try to find something better than what we already have, you also ended it quite nicely describing the realization of how what you were looking for you already had, you just didn't see it. I believe most of us humans never actually see this so we always stay unsatisfied (I can include myself in this with some ocutions of my life). I rerally enjoyed your writing and I can't wait to see your next post. Now off I go into the wind! lol

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

3 posted 2001-08-08 04:15 PM

Thanks you guys!
I'm glad you enjoyed it

Yeah Crash that is exactly what it is about realizing that we always want more yet we do have it all.
Hehe once again thanks fer replying glad you enjoyed

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-08-08 04:53 PM

Hey now brown cow!

Welcome to Passions Laura! Yet another Puerto Rican to add to the pile hehe. We're slowly going to take over.

Anyhow nice poem! I really liked it. Thought you did a fine job with the first post.
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Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-08-08 07:35 PM

Hey welcome to Passions in Poetry!

I'm really glad that you decided to join this crazy community of poets! I really liked this first post. Very well written... everyone here enjoys reading poetry, so you don't have to worry about that

You just keep sharing with us your writing with us! I really liked the message to this one... Well done! I enjoyed this.
I hope to see more posts and replies from you soon!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

mistic
Member

since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

6 posted 2001-08-09 01:46 PM

This is a really good first post. I really liked it. Welcome to passions

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

7 posted 2001-08-13 03:09 AM

nice first post...i really liked it. It's not too often you read poems from a delirious smurf...;-)

keep posting...and welcome to passions.

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
- Godsmack

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-09-12 01:18 PM

I know I'm late on this but still....

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Very impressive first post, now I have to go see if you have others. Thanks for joining us here in Passions for Poetry. I already know you are enjoying yourself, and I'm glad to see that.

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xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-09-12 01:35 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Im so glad that you decided to join us!! I loved your poem...it was well written and i cant wait to read more from you in the future so please keep em coming!!!

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

10 posted 2001-09-12 03:17 PM

*cough* REALLY late....

Welcome! lol...ok, the welcome is late but Welcome anyway.

A very cool piece. I could find a lot of meaning behind it and it's one of those philosophical pieces you ponder for hours on end.

I really like it and now you need to post lots more for us to read.

~AF~

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