‘Sonnet VI - Love in War’

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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

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State of Despair

0 posted 2001-08-08 12:46 PM

‘Sonnet VI - Love in War’

I shall compare love with process of war;
Both containing loss in a foolish game
But what do we get involved in them for?
When we are confronted with all the shame
All the anguish, tears and desperation
Stir up controversial ideas at hand
With bickering words in conversation
How do we suffocate this dreadful land?
What’s fair in love, is also just in war
Can’t we use division amongst the two?
For love is too sweet for us to adore
Upon the other hand, war will subdue
The come of earth’s end, what’s the better take,
Murderous cries… or of love to partake?

"War, what is it good for? Absolutely nothing!" - Edwin Starr

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-08-08 01:01 AM

"What’s fair in love, is also just in war
Can’t we use division amongst the two?
For love is too sweet for us to adore
Upon the other hand, war will subdue
The come of earth’s end, what’s the better take,
Murderous cries… or of love to partake?"
I really liked this write! Very thought provoking/interesting. You did a wonderful job here! Hope to see another soon.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-08-08 02:06 AM

I agree with Jess on this one.. very thought provoking piece you have here. I REALLY enjoyed this one..
"Stir up controversial ideas at hand
With bickering words in conversation
How do we suffocate this dreadful land?"
Wonderful read, and beautiful write. Nicely done, JD. This is a piece to be proud of.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

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Sparks, NV

3 posted 2001-08-08 03:07 AM

oh my do all the cute guys post on here? man all you guys are very good looking! all is far in love and war the age old saying! great poem.
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-08-08 04:32 PM

I really liked this one Jer. Awesome poem. It started out awesome but I felt the ending was a bit weak. ANyhow, all in all it completely rocked.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

5 posted 2001-08-08 08:38 PM

Nicely done! I never knew sonnets could make much sense...with shakespeare and his "thees" and "thous" and "thys"...anywho...yeah. The beginning and main body of this was very well done, although I have to say that near the end, I felt it was a bit...weak. But nonetheless, it was an awesome write! Great work!

-Leah

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