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Invisable Tears |
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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
So many mistakes so little I've done right It is an ongoing strugle I have to fight You judging me by just one glance You judging me without just 1 chance So many things go unseen Life can be cruel terrible and mean So many things that still remain I still have those days of endless pain You not knowing me, not knowing who Iam You being fake,just for looks and pretend You don't know me, and you think you do You dont know me, you don't have a clue Having to be the unoticed one It doesnt even matter, when its all said and done You laugh and stare You just dont care I have so much to deal with you just don't know This sadness is hidden it wont show My brother my sister both have a disability All you can do is laugh at them and me My grandma has cancer uncurable to mend Stop this laughing, I want it to end My life as a child,always so shy Stop this laughing, Im starting to cry My life as a child,so distant so sad My life as a child,so frustrated so mad Grown up and I still remain this way I want this judging to stop today Diagnosed with a sickness nothing i can do You just dont know me, and you think you do Going unnoticed without a glance Judging me on the outside,you never gave me a chance I have always been understanding of people who arent the same as me They are people, not retards why dont you just see Being told I was stupid,some thought I wouldnt make it I always said, "Don't worry I can take it." I try to be strong I try to belong But everything I do, turns out to be wrong Sometimes I think why was I given this life style Life presents problems, I just through them in a pile I try and lie to myself and say it is okay Still that pile of problems, haunts me today Laughter and teasing, stays through my mind Laughter and teasing, it's all so unkind I try and make my self better the way you want me But still went unnoticed,so unhappy Constint strugles I have you just dont know I hide my tears , they cannot show I don't see why you don't just like me for me I don't see why you don't like me for me, cause it's all I can be I'm sorry if that isn't good enough for you You don't know me, you may think you do Still struggles I'll have they wont disaper Life can be blury, and sometimes unclear All I can do is do my best So what If Iam different from the rest My life isn't easy, but yet it is blessed I cry my invisable tears I hide them for you to see I cry beacuse you don't understand me I cry beacuse It's all I can do I cry becuse of your laughing, I cry becuase of you Invisable tears, I don't want you to see Invisable tears,Life feels so emptiy |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is very sad and very well written I loved it.I hope everything gets better for you and keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Postman Pat Junior Member
since 2001-08-05
Posts 23The Great Land DownUnder |
This is a well written poem. I dont know all that much about poetry but i think that this reflects what you must be feeling pretty well. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I know how this feels second hand. My brother is mentally challenged so I know how it is to see how people treat individuals like my bro on a daily basis. Anyhow, I enjoyed the poem. It's raw and I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
ok another poem that hit so close to home i couldn't finish it. robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
I try to be strong I try to belong But everything I do, turns out to be wrong I know so well how this feels, although im not disabled myself my sister has a physical diasabiltiy and I've seen her go through so much pain, embarressment and more... I for one think this is so low, and i can really relate to how you feel... Such a sad post, ALLIE |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a very sad poem, but I enjoyed it all the same. You may want to correct the spelling of "Invisible", and there were a few places were the rhyme scheme could be patched up a little bit. Like in the 5th stanza, it just kinda disappeared. I really liked the content though. Nicely done. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
i know what it's like to be made fun of and have everything go wrong...and i can't gurantee it will get better....but with writing like this... i see a glimmer of hope inside...  great piece..keep writing" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
This is so awfully sad. People can be so cruel and heartless. I thought you did a wonderful job expressing yourself here. Very powerful. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I think everyone can relate to this. Everyone's felt like this before. It hit close to home a little for me. Awesome poem!  Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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