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keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC

0 posted 2001-07-18 03:59 PM


I don't know if anyone wants to read this. It's a poem, but it is personal. I thought it turned out great.

You all know the situation, and I know it too well
I’m joining the Army, and it’s gonna be hell
I just hope you’ll all be there for me
While I’m gone, please don’t quit caring for me
If there was another way, you know I’d stay
Just know you’ll be in my mind every single day
I’ll always stay true and I’ll never forget you
There’s no way I could, I got the tightest crew
Ben’s been the friend I can tell whatever
Late night talks, cracking jokes, and acting clever
There’s Kris, my partner in crime, sharing chronic amnesia
Always been there for each other, I’d do whatever to please ya
Matt’s rolling with me, so I’ll forget about you
Err, just joking dog, you’ve always been there too
Kyle, my man, keep your sights towards God
Please keep me in your prayers while I am abroad
My good friend Dough, he’s always been my homie
When your raps take you to the top, don’t forget you know me
Crystal, you’ve been there through all the hard times
I’ll never make it up to you in just one lifetime
Melissa, my new found friend and my new found interest
I’ll be back for you soon babe, you’re gonna be missed
Darc, my dog, you’ll be my friend forever
I won’t lose touch with you, you hear me, never
Em, you’re in my heart, you’ll always be
We fight constantly, but you mean so much to me
Mom and Dad, we had a rough 18 years
But I could always see the love, even through the tears
Lil’ sis, I love you so much even though we always brawl
Don’t grow up too fast girl, I don’t want to miss it all
It’s gonna be weird to leave the North Fork group
But I’ll keep on representing, throwing up the TOOP
I’ll miss you all but I’ll be back in 3
Please do what you can to keep in touch with me
I wanna be getting letters and receiving phone calls
I’m gonna do my best to keep in touch with you all
I only wanna see smiles when I leave, don’t want to see no tears
Swear to God I’ll be back during those 3 years
Keep me in your prayers, and I’ll keep you in mine
You’ll all be my best friends till the end of time

I love you all

Yes, it's true, I am joining the Army at the end of the summer. I'm gonna be all I can be, or some B.S. like that. I am going to do my best to continue posting while I'm in, but it's going to be alot less.

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

© Copyright 2001 Jon - All Rights Reserved
Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 245
Ilinois
1 posted 2001-07-18 04:54 PM


Jon,
I thought this was great.  I hope you show this to all the people you wrote this for, because I am sure it would be deeply appreciated.  Alot of my friends joined the army shortly after we graduated last year and we still love them as much as ever but we miss them like crazy. I am sure your friends will feel the same for you. Good Luck in all that you do.  Thanks for sharing it was a great post.
Always,
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
2 posted 2001-07-18 06:58 PM


Jon! I really liked this. I liked how you addressed all your friends and loved ones and said a lil something special to each and every one of them. Very nice idea. I'm sure they'd love to see what you wrote. Good luck "being all you can be."  
CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
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Selah, WA, USA
3 posted 2001-07-18 07:20 PM


I liked this.  Great how you put something to and about all of your friends in one poem.  Very good.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30
Posts 497
In a dream world
4 posted 2001-07-18 09:04 PM


it's so sweet.......almost made me cry!! I hope you print this out or email this to everyone of those ppl in that poem. they'd all love it. I know it  

I LOVE ZU, hey Albie, Cody, Allan, Carly, Cherish, Lizzy, Kris, *HUGS JAVI*, Tamma, Acire, and Branden.
*HUGS ZU*

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5 posted 2001-07-19 01:43 AM


talk about a sweet tribute...i think you wrote this very well on this ocasion..hope everything gets as you hoped for in the army...greatbjob...it did turn out well, Jon

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6 posted 2001-07-19 06:48 PM


This did turn out well, Jon.  Wow.. I don't know what to say.  This poem was so sad.. yet so optimistic.  I wish you the best.. good luck serving our country.  You'll be awesome   The two lines I loved the most in the whole poem were:
"Lil’ sis, I love you so much even though we always brawl
Don’t grow up too fast girl, I don’t want to miss it all"
That really hit hard... I have an older brother, and to think of him going away for so long kills me.  Wow.. this is a very well written poem.  You addressed all your friends.  *hugs* You'll be in my prayers.  I hope you still come around passions a few times, just to pop in and say hi   You'll be missed.  Awesome work here.  I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada
7 posted 2001-07-19 06:58 PM


Jon,
Hey well....the army...enjoy it. I hope tocontinue seeing your posts.awesome poem. I liked the way it was YOUR poem. We wont forget ya. email me sometime.

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
8 posted 2001-07-19 07:14 PM


Hey everybody, thanks for the replies. I didn't think anyone would want to reply cause it was so personal. Marie- I will definately be back to visit you guys, there are too many good people here. Ina- I will definately email you sometime. I will have to stay in touch with everyone. There will be a few months while I'm in bootcamp where I won't be able to post, but after that I will find a way to get on. Trust me, I'll be having a whole lot to talk about. God Bless
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

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9 posted 2001-07-23 11:40 PM


This was great! I really hope that you do great! Good luck!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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