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LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

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0 posted 2001-07-17 06:11 PM

“Talking To The Stars”

Last night I laid upon my car
As I told a story to the stars

I told them the story of my love
From its first precious breaths
Till its dying hours

I told them how it started
How I fell in love with you
How those nights with you
Changed me forevermore

I told them how you made me feel
How you breathed life
Into my hollow corps
And taught me how live again

I told them how I love you
With every ounce of life in me
And how with every breath I take
And every beat of my heart
I fall more in love with you

I told them of our happy times
Of the nights I held you close
How being with you
Was more then heaven could ever offer

I told them how it ended
Through the sounds of someone else
On the phone of one you hated
Yet you are with him now

I told them how I felt
That you are the only one for me
Though if I must I will live alone
If you find your love within another

I told them my story
The story of my love
With a smile on my face
As tears streamed from my eyes

I told them I loved you
That I love you still
And without you I feel lost
So I ask the starts to guide me
And you together again

I told them that story
Scene by scene
All the love and joy
Along with the sorrow

So I told my story to the stars
With tears streaming from my eyes
And smile upon my lips
As I spoke of my love for you

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-07-17 07:03 PM

I LOVE this poem. The way the whole poem about you talking to the stars is awesome, and then the whole storyline... about how you met, how you fell in love, how those night were so special, and then how it ended... that was fantastic. This is a library piece... it really hit home for me, and brought back familiar memories. Wowsers, awesome work. I enjoyed this. KUDOS to you.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-07-17 08:34 PM

I really liked this Lonewolf.
The way you wrote it, the story it told- magnificent. I could really relate to it. And the image of you smiling with tears in your eyes while talking baout your love....so sweet. Wonderful job here!

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-19 12:03 PM

wow..beautiful...amazing job on the this piece...the way itw as written the imagery the emotions..i thought you protrayed VERY well...im loving it

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-07-19 02:23 AM

I liked this one. I thought it was really nicely done here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

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5 posted 2001-07-19 02:33 AM

Thank you all for your replies

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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