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alex m Junior Member
since 2002-08-27
Posts 12 |
Sometimes a lie is better sometimes it's good to hide so I don't think I'll let her see what I feel inside Sometimes I feel all rotten sometimes I feel sick And how far I'd have gotten if i knew what made you tick Sometimes I feel insane Sometimes I feel depressed I've got this pain Thats in the right of my chest Sometimes I feel locked up Sometimes I feel crazy Sometimes I wish i would speak up Even that would amaze me Sometimes I wish i could get away Sometimes I wish i could be free The sight of you everyday makes me wonder why you can't see me Sometimes you make me wonder Sometimes you make me sad But when I see your splendor The world doesnt look as bad Sometimes you make me wanna weep Sometimes you make me wanna cry Sometimes I just cannot sleep And your the reason why |
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Captain_Simian New Member
since 2002-07-15
Posts 5 |
I'm not the best person for critical assesment of poetry, but i know what makes me think and this poem does, In my mind the only reason to write poetry is to give others a glimpse of what you think/feel. Simian |
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Bob G New Member
since 2002-08-27
Posts 3 |
I really liked this poem especially the last verse keep writing! |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow, i REALLY liked this alot, the rhyming was awesum and this is goin in my library, great job.  ~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~ |
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