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the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

0 posted 2001-06-26 02:08 AM

ok it's 210 am and I'm talking to you
don't know why but it's something to do
for some reason you've intregued me so
there is so much about you I'd like to know
like your real personality
is it all it's cracked up to be
cause if so then it's beyond reality
beyond the highest comprehension of me.
you dislike guys cause they just aren't right
with the wit you have you'll always win a fight
sense of humor that's hard to find
a strength but yet something so very kind
you act tough but I see past it to the insyde
though at just a glance it's easy for you to hide
yeah you can make the boys run away so fast
but upon closer examination they see something that will last
maybe a woman that was spoke of in Proverbs 31
or maybe one that follows after Gods own Son
someday I pray you find a man to treat you right
cause your life to be full of joy and delight
cause though you may act all tough
getting along with you isn't that rough
for the man that gets you someday
I know would have it no other way
like I said your not as tough as you try to be
it just takes a bit of a closer look to see.

please don't hurt me lol ( you know who I'm talking to )

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-06-26 02:33 AM

Aww... this is pretty good! The rhyme scheme was nice. Good work... enjoyed, as always.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-06-26 09:21 AM

something (nice) to be said about someone who takes the time to look a little closer, a little deeper, to find the real person underneath the mask.......I liked this

scout
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since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

3 posted 2001-06-26 01:29 PM

I love the title! some people just don't like things written for them.

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears." - Ez. 24:1

FoxXena
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since 2001-06-13

Posts 141
where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted

4 posted 2001-06-26 08:35 PM

I would be in deep do-do if I answered a call at that time of night.

~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~
~*~I say it is the written word.~*~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-06-27 01:19 AM

I enjoyed this one rescue.....nicely done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-06-27 07:10 PM

really sweet words written in such a sweet way. great write rescue. hope to see more of your work. keep sharing

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

7 posted 2001-06-27 09:21 PM

Wow. I'm really impressed.
Great poem
Bel

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-06-28 12:10 PM

something to think about...i liked what you were saying in this one

...nicely written throughout...great job!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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9 posted 2001-06-28 12:11 PM

this is great!!! the flow seemed so natural and almost conversational. the title is pretty captivating, too. great work!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

10 posted 2001-06-28 12:37 PM

Aaww... this is great!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

11 posted 2001-06-29 02:02 AM

Who could kill you after a piece like this? It's very nice. Well done.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

12 posted 2001-07-05 02:00 AM

Yet another great read, Rescue.
I enjoyed it bunches.

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