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Teen Poetry #5

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Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

0 posted 2002-06-20 10:37 AM

Can't get you out of my mind,
It's hard for me to find.
Can't get you out of my head,
All the words we once said.
Head on collision and cerebral mind warp.
Twisted and lost,
Can't bear the cost.
Everything now decayed,
Wishing our love to be repaid.
Head on collision and cerebral mind warp.
Think of you all the time,
To the top I fight to climb.
Sit with disbelief and shame in my eye,
All these nights I lay here and cry.
Head on collision and cerebral mind warp.

Madness is the gift that has been given to me....Mercyless Fate

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

1 posted 2002-06-21 02:45 PM

I have to admit, I got a little lost the first time I read it, but probably since my stereo is on to loud. Once I turned it off and read it again, I unserstood it. I like when a work makes me do that. Keeps my intrest like that. Good job.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

Faerie Lick
New Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 9
Curious, so curious

2 posted 2002-06-21 03:28 PM

"Sit with disbelief and shame in my eye,
All these nights I lay here and cry.
Head on collision and cerebral mind warp."

It tickled and scratched. I like that. A poem should always be able to do that in my not-so-humble opinion. *smiles*

I hate liars too. May they burn in hell.

Hey, look at me.

songsoftheaftermath
Member

since 2002-06-19

Posts 84
a world of disarray

3 posted 2002-06-26 03:53 AM

i loved the repetition...you used it well...
have you ever put your words to music? cuz they have a very lyrical feel to it.
keep writing kylesome!

could the darkness be my friend?

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