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fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-07-13 02:29 AM

Completely Without

Touch me with a fragment as i kiss
The breath echoeing behind you so
fair?
Still emptiness left with as you
have gone to another place now
solidly realized i was always
Completely without
you?
Spurred and skipped through the
hours under hazy coral clouds a
personal piano counting the beats
left with you
One silence left behind by you
A single solitary silence when
All i want is you
But i'm left behind as shattered
scattered pieces completely
without you
Still lying again never touched
said lips
feels close enough from here
down below
away
completely without
my human existence

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-07-13 03:08 AM

wow...this expressed some strong emotions...i can relate

...the ending was quite powerful!...i liked it, Sean.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-07-13 03:41 AM

Ouch...the things some people put us through! So many heart felt things in this. Lots of wows. Good job.

~AF~

GREMLINS ARE TRYING TO STEAL MY PANTS!!!!!!! *sobs*

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-07-13 04:11 PM

Mind blowingly powerful.
Great write, Sean.
I enjoyed it bunches.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-07-17 02:29 PM

Fozzy a poem well done here. I really loved this one. Very powerful words!! I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

5 posted 2001-07-17 06:00 PM

this was awesome. so powerful, i loved it.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2001-08-16 02:05 AM

fozzyozzy-
   Much emotion poured into this piece.
   Very powerful write.

   *smiles*
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

silvrduck
Member

since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

7 posted 2001-08-16 02:28 AM

Wow, great expression. The ending was amazing.
keep it up.. smile
Sarah

*love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.*

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

8 posted 2001-08-16 05:41 PM

ugh! i've been gone too long, now i see what i've been missing! you, once again, have impressed me muchly! i especially love how as your reading you read some of it as a statement, but then you throw a question mark in there and it forces the reader to go back and re-read...good job!!

me

zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

9 posted 2001-08-16 06:37 PM

This was great. as usual.

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

10 posted 2001-08-16 07:15 PM

i agree with everyone else this was very good

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

11 posted 2001-08-16 10:58 PM

my goodness this was good. i really really really liked it. printed it out and everything so it will go in my box'o stuff

great job, i enjoyed it!

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

12 posted 2001-08-20 12:26 PM

An oldie, I see, but a goodie nonetheless! Nicely done, Foz! I REALLY enjoyed this, as always. You have so much talent.. You impress me time and time again. Nice work!

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

13 posted 2001-08-20 03:04 AM

In your poem you express your emotions very well and I really loved your poem.Keep up the awsome work I can't wait to read more.
Lauren

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