»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #5
»
Sugar confetti day
| Teen Poetry #5 |
|
Sugar confetti day |
|
|
Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
|
My eyes twinkle Beneath the sun's lemonade rays Surely it's a sugar confetti day My heart is beaming With chocolate laced dreams Surely I can For one day Relinquish within these Swirling, Ice Cream emotions Hot fudge, peanuts Gum drops I adore But my eyes must Be deceving me Cause I see The sweetest thing Coming over to me His smile always Gives my heart A tooth ache And surely this must Be a sugar confetti day Because he's right beside me In which is sweeter Than any piece of candy... [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (04-05-2002 07:06 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"His smile always Gives my heart A tooth ache" This is absolutely delightful Ceinwyn! Wonderful phrasing and superb imagery, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
||
quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i loved the line: 'And surely this must Be a sugar confetti day' you should try putting this to music. it would make a great song. /jen/ so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
||
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh this is so great! That is just too cute!  I am a geek!! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
