Teen Poetry #5 |
I'm falling... |
Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I told myself I couldn't.. But of course I did. I really knew I shouldn't.. But who was I to kid? I started down a path. I already know where it will end. I think of it everytime we laugh. For soon we will reach the bend. I want to hold on forever. The problem is do you? I keep saying never say never. But that just wouldn't be true.. How do I take the fall, without ever landing? You name I want to call, but yet I remain silently standing. I am trapped in confusion. Do you care? Is this just an illusion? Life just isn't fair. For now I can't say it. So I'll write it instead. The pieces have begun to fit. I am scared the outcome you may dread. For you I am falling. Can't you tell? Nevermind I stalling, I already fell. ( Hey everyone, I haven't written anything in awhile but I needed to write something about this, because well i am crazy about him, who knows with him though) Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
girl if he ain't gonna love you for you ten kick him to the curb! i am me don't tell me different!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awesome write and nice to see you writing again!!! Loved the poem..keep up the great work! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is really good. good luck with it all and if he hasn't fallen make him! |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Well the question now is, do I give it to him? I am extremely nervous, what do you guys think? Thank's for the replies I really appreciate it. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
For you I am falling. Can't you tell? Nevermind I stalling, I already fell. OOO I loved that stanza...great job voiceless, I enjoyed this thoroughly!! Great Job! ~Lisa |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Well I sent it to him.. Now I am just really nervous.. Thanks again! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Very impressive! Nice flow, nice stanza's and shape, form, et all. Loved the ending: "For you I am falling. Can't you tell? Nevermind I'm stalling, I already fell." Superb ending. Very splendid. Love is risk.... without taking chances you'll never get rewards. But with risk comes... risk of pain, hurt, et all. Indeed. How are things going? Did he respond? ~ Titus "My body is merely the canvas of my soul." |
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the reign of chaos New Member
since 2002-06-23
Posts 6 |
you have me baby, always and forever |
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