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Silent Scream |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
I don't care anymore I really dont.... Go right ahead And make the anger stronger. Like a leech You suck away my forgiveness, Secretly hoping that if you have it all I won't be able to get mad at you But in reality It just leaves our short tempers To rub each other raw. You dig your claws deeper With each 'accidental' stinging word Or sharp tone of voice. You know I rarely forget So it should be no surprise To find me keeping count in my head, Each new wound coming before the others can heal. Instaed of speaking up, I stay silent Until I'll no longer be able to handle it And will eventually silently storm off, Leaving you to figure out How to make the pieces fit Into this puzzle We call love. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Very nice. Are you talking to a boyfriend or something in this poem? Or is it just a rant? Either way, it is very good. *Amanda* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"You suck away my forgiveness, Secretly hoping that if you have it all I won't be able to get mad at you But in reality It just leaves our short tempers To rub each other raw." I loved this Stephanie. So powerful. You expressed yourself wonderfully. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job here. I liked this one. You did well in expressing.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Good job on this one. I liked it. Keep posting! - Cody - |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
Very well done. I liked it. I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you? |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
I liked that poem. It was very good by expressing what you felt. Keep posting! **Sarah  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is very emotional. Hope things do improve for you. Make sure this person rids of the stinging words. keep sharing. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I basically agree w/ everyone else. This is a well written poem. You're talented. The emotion in this poem is SO strong. No one should let anyone make them feel this way. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
My best friend got ina relationship like this and she expressed this also. I find this poem very flavorful with wrods and emotion, the words that stood out to me were,leech, wound, expreesive words that mean pain really came out here. /Nick/ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice job on the poem. I have felt this before, but I think it's best to let it out. For your sake mainly. This is still a really good poem. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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