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chasing rain
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0 posted 2002-01-25 11:40 PM


An hour glass waits silently to be upturned to hold a mortal's fate,
And a pair of white-tinted spectacles lie blind.
A wooden desk within a musky library, dark from being unused
As a light flickers on behind a door.
A man in a chair holds his book high
His specs forgotten in a dark library.
The leather couch sticks to the skin of his neck
As his gray hair turns another shade of white.
He closes his book, then, inserting his favorite bookmark,
Opens the door to the library.
Replacing the book in its rightful spot, he looks at the hour glass
And giggling like a little boy of 6, he turns the glass
Watching white sand spill to the other empty world
Suffocating flames of life.
Time passes, and the light behind the door fades
And all that's left is a leather couch, and some books
That never meant a thing to the world.

"All he ever wanted was a little time alone,
All he ever wanted was a little time to dream
All he ever wanted was to kick up dust and sand
All in a world that time passed by in screams."


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I wanted to try something new...rhyming only goes so far.

-Leah



Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

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1 posted 2002-01-26 01:38 AM


I love how you write Leah...the imagery you use and your power to somehow draw these amazing pictures in my head with your words is outstanding..your very talented to say the least

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Ceinwyn
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2 posted 2002-01-26 12:53 PM


I really liked it=) I could actually visualize everything you wrote..I look forward to reading more

Kristen

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Cali
3 posted 2002-01-26 01:04 PM


..wow. I liked this one a lot. The hour glass was good.
knightlyshadows
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4 posted 2002-01-29 02:49 AM


ok.. im wonderin why something from leah only has 3 posts so far. WHATS WRONG WITH YOU PEOPLE!? anyways..
ive always loved how you're able to bring the images of your story to my mind leah. here is just another example of your fantastic imagery. i loved the detailing you used in this.. as well as the last italiced bit. to me, this took a twist at the end and showed a deeper meaning. i like how youre able to surprise and keep my interest in your work. great piece, as usual leah.
tiff

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I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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5 posted 2002-01-30 01:27 AM


Leah, I love it!!! I just... It's going in my library!

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6 posted 2002-01-30 03:39 AM


gotta agree...it was great

Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls

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7 posted 2002-01-30 06:17 AM


LOVED this poem!  Great work!  I can see in my mind my own images of what you write!  Keep up the good work!  This is great!
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8 posted 2002-01-31 03:20 PM


Leah-chic, wonderfully done. The depths that you write always amaze me. This one reminds me of one I wrote, "The Days Flow On", just, better. Again, nicely done. Love your work.

Sincerely,
Titus

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           -Groucho Marx

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