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Feeling Like Alanis
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Feeling Like Alanis |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
So here's another fight, Another day and another night where you’re telling me everything that I do wrong But what is this I see? A certain strength rising in me Telling me not to take it anymore and walk right out the door So my darling, has your jaw hit the floor? Surprised that I’m not crying Surprised that I could find my feet and walk away? Surprised that I could get angry and mean every word that I say? Surprised that I'm not sorry? Well look who can dish it out, but can't take what he gives You say it hurts, baby? How you're trembling... How do you think I felt before when you said worse words to me? So my darling, has your jaw hit the floor? What am I missing? Besides you in this pathetic state I bet you never thought I could be this way, but now I've got a lot to say And it's too bad, so sad that we have to play these games of love and war, but hey at least at war I can win Because I'm strong, even though you think I'm not Because I'm big enough to admit when I'm wrong And because I love myself enough To know that this isn’t how I want my life to go So my darling, tell me, has your jaw hit the floor? Now that you know, I’m more than you bargained for 1.16.02 -- the calm before the storm -- |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Oke, so it's not very good at all. But I was angry and in a take-no-"poo" mood so yeah... I just let it flow. Feeling like Alanis. lol Thanks everyone. P.S. - That would be the storm... haha Jaime -- the calm before the storm -- jaimespoetry.blogspot.com [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-16-2002 09:35 PM).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I like it jamie!!! I feel like this sometimes...you've captured ur feelings and emotions very well in this..nicely written yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wonderful work!!! *Applause* I loved this... the repition was perfect, each time it was repeated was stronger and stronger. I loved the message... like you finally told everyone what you really feel, and if they expect you to be sorry, tough luck because you're not. I think I need to that way more often... Kick-arse poem you have here... it's going straight in my library!! Can't wait to see more.. --Marie I wish you fingers could touch all I can't say... <i>no should ever feel this alone.</i> |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Wow Jaime!! This is really a powerful one! It's so great to find the strength to stand up for yourself!  Go for it girl!!_,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
you you you oughta know  There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
that was awesome. I know what you mean. Great job. Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 Yoda, my friend, what can I say? *claps* I loved it. A powerful piece, with, as was said, perfect repitition. A stand up for yourself piece, but very well done. I enjoyed it. As always, I love you work. Keep it up, and I'll see you soon. Sincerely, Titus "Shot to the heart, and you're to blame... Darling, you give love a bad name." - Bon Jovi [This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (01-17-2002 05:46 PM).] |
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TigerZ Member
since 2002-01-02
Posts 83Ontario, Canada |
WOW! Excellent poem. A life without love…is no life at all. |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
Independent Woman |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Ahhhhhh... gag me. Paul. You will be shot. -- the calm before the storm -- |
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AshlieAcklin New Member
since 2002-01-17
Posts 6 |
I very much enjoyed your poem. I think it was very good indeed, and would actually love to hand this out to a couple males I know...my luck with boys..sucks. I see you are a Senior Member and cannot wait to read more. Much Love AMA |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Uh, Yoda, who's Paul? You okay?  LMAO...  Sincerely, Titus Smile, Jesus loves you. :) |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Paul is my bit.. uhhh.. friend (xEmperorEmber) Peace Jaime -- the calm before the storm -- |
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