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Dark Goddess Awakening |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I feel the gentle smoke twirl around my body and awaken my sense of mysterious enchantment Candlelight paints beautiful shadows for me to taste along the observant walls Sensuality smiles in the cold night air But in the distance, close to home - I hear an erruption of shattered voices crying out in desperation But they're call is lost in the dark clouds of the night, And for this tragic maze I find myself swallowing my own poison Dying for your sins 12.11.01 The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow. that was great. your imagery is amazing. i enjoyed it very much. regina |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Your pieces are always so real, and dark. You have a wonderfully blunt and deep way of writing.... I enjoy how you don't hold back in your poetry. Good write  and keep it up.Sincerely, Titus |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Love the imagery! Great work way to paint a picture with your words. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
dont ask me why but i can just see a painting in my head of exactly what your trying to explain in the poem...hmm..wonderful job! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
It's awesome to see you posting again! Great to have your name back in the forums... This is a beautifully-written poem. It's what I've missed from you... the dark, mysterious poetry. The imagery in this piece is, as usual, amazing. Candlelight paints beautiful shadows for me to taste Very cool. Emotions you can taste show the intensity. Very nice work, I enjoy reading your poetry. I also really enjoyed the ending. The power in such few words is really fantastic. It's hard to do that, and do it well. But you've done a great job. Post again soon --Marie "It was a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
that was great. i liked it a lot. great job. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
"But they're call is lost in the dark clouds of the night, And for this tragic maze I find myself swallowing my own poison Dying for your sins" Falling on your own sword, writing your own death certificate *sigh* It's life gone wrong and it's wonderful. I've always enjoyed reading your poetry for the aftertaste it leaves and the questions it poses. Very cool imagery and excellent use of the fantasy world. When I read the opening lines, I immediately thought of Alice in Wonderland. Don't ask why... Bravo, bravo. Be proud etc etc. I look forward to more. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Wow, twisting turning painted imagry that twirls the mind in with it. Great words, greater pictures. Great work "It is better to have loved and lost than to have never have loved at all" ...but the pain of both is equally unbearable... |
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