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AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21
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0 posted 2001-12-22 11:57 AM


This is part 1 of a 3 part collection I am writing as part of a christmas gift. The collection as a whole will be "Past, Present, Future", but I will post it piece by piece as I get it done. This is my first time with this format, hope you like it! Thanks for readin.

Past


A word, a kiss, a single touch
That flares a soul inside,
A sound, a taste, a single breath
The force of love provide.

A gaze so soft ensures my heart
Of love’s protective song,
A gentle sway of rhythm’s voice
Flows melody along.

A fragile touch, a soft caress
To ease the mortal hold,
A quiet murmur, gentle truth
Reveals a verse untold.

A tender kiss of tranquil bliss
Calms the cold uprising,
A hushed call, a gentle trace
Of our love devising.

A soft reflection in your eyes
Glistens toward the night,
A solid promise, guaranteed
Through this eternal plight.

A past of thankful memories
Such sweet recollections,
I am so grateful, my Dear Love
For these sweet reflections.

~Alicia Morris
12-22-01


Thank you, Allan, For your Help!

[This message has been edited by AngelPoet87 (12-22-2001 11:58 AM).]

© Copyright 2001 Alicia Morris - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
1 posted 2001-12-22 03:04 PM


Your first time in this format?  You're a natural then!  This is one of the best poems I've read, better then most I've written.  I like how you kept the stanzas short and sweet.  All in all, a very good peice.  Can't wait to read the rest!

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vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2001-12-22 07:12 PM


It's very rare that I read a poem that flows this well, yet alone one that flows and is beautiful!! You've hit both of those with this piece; great job!!

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21
Posts 280
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3 posted 2001-12-22 07:15 PM


Thanks a bunch, its something I'm working on!
[Ice Box]
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since 2001-12-13
Posts 21
Canada
4 posted 2001-12-22 07:16 PM


AngelPoet87

You have a very nice flow running throughout your piece! The wording was well done, and fitted nicely within the format. I don't have much to say about this, partly due to the fact that sleep eludes me every night, so I can't think

St
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ght. *Jingle* *zZzZzZz* Hehehe. Thanks for sharing this lovely post!

[Ice Box]

Bitter.

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10
Posts 450
Alabama, USA
5 posted 2001-12-22 08:45 PM


Very nice Ali. Can't wait for the other two.

-Adam

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
6 posted 2001-12-23 02:46 AM


Wow.. very nice I really like it keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind


Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
7 posted 2001-12-23 04:15 AM


Nice...very nice.  i'd hafta agree tho..if this is the 1st time you used this format..then ya got skills...LoL..nice work

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
- Godsmack

"If who i am is what i have, and what i have is lost...then who am i?"
-unknown

"Maybe som

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