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[Ice Box] Junior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 21Canada |
Parallel Universe Mirrors Mirrors Shattered beyond recognition Within her dreams Broken like the glass that Floating, catching her, and Spills her blood that runs Falling into oblivion Upon her creases like the rivers. In the dark. Light Light Penetrates the glassy eyes Watches from the window Of her stare Behind the starlit sky And reaches deep into the Hidden in the moon Heart that trembles at the touch. Afraid. Reflection Reflection Of faithless beauty Of silent corners That breaks upon In another world of The slightest touch Two sided figures Deformed by a single Line. Fingerprint. [Ice Box] ps- If you read the italics first, you are a dreamer. If you read the normal font first, you are a deep thinker. Just thought I'd let you know. *grin* If you aren't sure, you could try to read it again, and go with what you see first. Freeze. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
a dreamer, deep thinker. hmm and maybe why i liked this MORE... since im considered both and beyond...  anyway about the format its totally creative and awesomely[word?] done. never seen anything like it [yet] i read it all together then italics alone and standard alone...nonetheless, loved the; thought provoking quite deep piece  oh WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! hope to see you post,read and reply often. Cya  Hey...#25437 |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome, dreamer here LOL that was cool I liked it very much!! great first post Please check your email for a special greeting! |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
[Ice Box]: Wow, this is one awesome post. I'M A DREAMER!!! Yeah, go me. I'd have to say the format was very creative, and the wording was just enough so that it wasn't corny sounding. I liked the "two edged figure", the way you said it was a line. I can see that. It almost parallels the mirrors at the beginning into two worlds, separated by a line. Very deep. And welcome to pip! I hope you enjoy it here! Great stuff! ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
 Welcome to Passions!! Woohoo! I'm a dreamer! hura! *dances* You've certainly made an impression on me already. This piece rocks. The double piece running through it worked really well and gave it an extra boost. I hope you love it here to bits like we do and remember to reply as well as post. It's common curtesy if you want to be recognised. Thanks for sharing. I look forward to more. ~AF~ Caution: Filling is hot. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Wow! Leah put it best, with "two edged figure". I loved the format man! It was very creative, different, and origonal! At first I was confused...lol, I was reading both first, and trying to make sense of it.... I know, I know... blonde roots. Anyways... I'm both... what does that make me??? I loved it. Great first post. Hope you like it here buddy...Sincerely, Titus |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
"Deformed by a single Fingerprint." i guess im the only deep thinker here. i loved this ice box!!!..this is SUCH an awesome first post. i cant wait to read more of your poetry *greedily asks* MORE!!   WELCOME Ice Box! i hope you really enjoy your stay and share MORE and MORE of your work...youve seriously got me all excited by this post. im REALLY looking forward to reading more. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
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[Ice Box] Junior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 21Canada |
[SEA]- I'm glad you liked it! And thank you for the greeting card. *smile*[chasing rain]- Hahaha, I like your little "The world is mine" thing. *laugh* Thanks for your in-depth view! I'll see ya around, ne? [anonymousfemale]- So many anonymous people...hehe. Thanks for commenting, and don't worry, I'll reply to other poems. *grins* [PoetryIsLife]- I think a lot of people liked the format. *smile* Although, it was a bit tough trying to make it understandable and sensible. lol, blond roots. I think we all have 'em, even if we aren't blond. *smile* Thanks for stopping by! [cherish]- I'm pretty sure you're not the only deep thinker here. You really think it's awesome? ME TOO! Hehe...okay, going back into humble mode here. *Ahem* I'll see if I have enough time to post another, what with evil finals and all. But thanks for the encouragement!And to anyone else who might stop by, thank you very much! [Ice Box] Snow. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
a "psychological limbo" you say; HMmmMMm. you trying to persaude me in doing something? *thinks* BRING IT ON!!!  lol *jingles*Hey...#25437 |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
wow this is really good, I really enjoyed the read... apparantly I'm a deep thinker... err... what was I saying?.... oh well great work hope to see more of you around here Zu If I gave you $1 for every reply you might be rich, but looking at your post count I think not. |
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