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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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0 posted 2001-07-05 05:35 PM

Man of words.

A wizard of expression,
A wizard of expression,
Casting the spells of love,
Casting the spells of love,
Love of a casting wizard,
The spells of expression ,

Wishing words of magic,
Wishing words of magic,
The illusion in your eyes,
The illusion in your eyes,
Illusion of your words,
Magic in the wishing eyes,

Bound within your tears,
Bound within your tears,
Torment of the soul,
Torment of the soul,
Bound within the soul,
Tears of your torment,

Bound within the soul,
Words of your love spells,
Expression of your magic,
Casting tears of torment,
The Illusion of a wizard,
In the wishing eyes.

Zu...

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

1 posted 2001-07-05 06:13 PM

I love this poem Zu!! and I don't think you could be a better poet. you are awesome!! one of the best to me...

-->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile.
*~!!~*I love Zu!!*~!!~*

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

2 posted 2001-07-05 07:09 PM

This was amazing work. Veyr awesome. Youve become an impressive poet, bravo.

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-07-05 07:26 PM

Oh I LOVED this! I loved how everything came together in the end. Brilliant write Zu!

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

4 posted 2001-07-05 10:26 PM

I really liked this. ::shakes head:: how on earth do you do that?! lol I don't think I could ever write like that... Great poem!

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-06 12:15 PM

I love paradelles! And you write them so well, Zu! Wonderful work. Simply awesome. Another one for the library! Nicely done

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

6 posted 2001-07-06 12:25 PM

This kicks BUTT!!!!!!!!!!!!

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

7 posted 2001-07-06 01:18 AM

~mr zu~
hey hey this poem rocked!! i have no idea how u write paradelles..i'd pry get so confused lol. you did an awesome job on it tho. yaaaay! tis goin in my library.
-fear-

emotions are like evil serpents that coil around your mind---me "i cannot save you, i can't even save myself"--stabbing westward

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-07-06 02:53 AM

amazing job here...im sOo glad to see this again from you

...very impressed...the 3rd stanza was my fav...im loving it.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-07-07 03:57 AM

Beautiful paradelle....for me the ending is the best part of the whole thing, and you did so wonderful on this one Andrew.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

10 posted 2001-07-07 07:58 AM

Thanks for all the replies, I really love the paradelle and this is one of my favourites at the moment so thanx for all the replies everyone

Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

11 posted 2001-07-07 01:19 PM

Wow, this was amazing, the first I've read of your poems but I definately hope to see more. Keep writing (for our sake!!)

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

12 posted 2001-07-11 11:54 AM

*appluads*
Well done Zu
I've seen your poetry grow
keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

mistic
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since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

13 posted 2001-07-11 11:56 AM

really good... I liked the reptition a lot, it was a nice part of the poem.

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

14 posted 2002-09-24 03:13 PM

Adding this to my library.

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