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AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

0 posted 2001-11-03 07:17 PM

When I become lost
and hopelessly roam,
the light in your eyes
is what leads me home.

When I have no one
that seems to care,
I look beside me
and you're always there.

When I become deaf
and can't hear the song,
its the rhyme in your voice
that guides me along.

When I loose all hope
and just want to quit,
its the thought of you
to which I commit.

When I loose my strength
you carry me along,
and show me the way
in which to stay strong.

When I loose my sight
you show me the brightest stars,
and I know the world
and all its joy is ours.

When I hear the words
"I Love You" I know,
our love for eachother
will forever continue to grow.

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel.

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

1 posted 2001-11-03 07:37 PM

Whoa...I am liking this one. Very sweet and touching. Good one...
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

2 posted 2001-11-03 10:18 PM

I really liked this one Ali. There were a few places where it seemed a...little off, but the overall feeling of the poem was very very good. I liked it a lot.

-Adam

"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

3 posted 2001-11-03 10:27 PM

Very well done in my opinion!! Keep it up!

~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!?

~Love me because I am Rhonda

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

4 posted 2001-11-04 01:43 AM

Oh my this hit me and i think i know why (sorry personal information). This was a nice fresh format. good job.

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

5 posted 2001-11-04 08:02 PM

Very well written poem I loved it keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

Honey
Member

since 2001-10-09

Posts 92
Hot girl From Canada

6 posted 2001-11-04 11:00 PM

All I can say is WOW and library!!

It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In.

He Who Laughs Last Thinks Slowest!!

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-11-05 01:33 PM

Aww this is such a sweet poem...this person thats always by your side sounds great...never let em go

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-11-10 11:36 PM

This is a really sweet poem.

AngelPoet87 encourages Constructive Critiques: "As a young poet striving in a world of poetic differences, it is essential for me to get as much feedback as possible on how to improve my poetry in order for me to ever reach my goal."

......Just keep writing and it will help you grow

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?

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