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pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

0 posted 2001-10-16 06:40 PM

  grow between
the tast of
love and dance
  dream beneath
   the cloud of
     morning


        me101601

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2001-10-16 08:37 PM

This was very good. I liked that it was short. more impact to it.

Regina

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

2 posted 2001-10-16 09:23 PM

zzzzz

Knight of Secrecy
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since 2001-10-12

Posts 113
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-10-16 10:09 PM

very good poem
-CM.

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

4 posted 2001-10-16 10:42 PM

short and sweet.

enjoyable.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

5 posted 2001-10-16 10:50 PM

Short and nicely written as always. Just a question, have you ever tried elaborating on any of your old poems. I'd like to see bigger chunks of your writing, you know what I mean. Then again that's just me

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

6 posted 2001-10-17 02:01 AM

hey ya'll, thanx for your responses! as for expanding on older poems fozzy, which ones do you have in mind, b/c chances are i probably have...

me

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-10-17 02:36 AM

interesting way of protraying sleep...i liked it.

=)

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-10-17 12:08 PM

Pharon, I really think you should explain a lot of your poems after you post them up. Like, after people have commented about them, i think you should give off the explanation, that is, if you'd like.
Personally, I admire your writing and would love to know the deeper meaning behind the mind that is you.
I enjoyed this poem greatly and look forward to more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-10-18 10:29 AM

I agree w/dopey...yes i do

lol hehehe..i'd like to see you explain your poems as well...i enjoyed this as long with all your others a lot...nice job!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

10 posted 2001-10-18 10:29 AM

oooopsie daisy

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

[This message has been edited by xShUgArHiGhx (edited 10-18-2001).]

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