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Blind To The World |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
I'm holding you in my arms, Your smell is so sweet. Kissing you is like heaven, Being with you is a treat. We hold hands in the theater, We cuddle at the park. You whisper sweet nothings in my ear, When we are alone in the dark. If only this wern't a fantasy, And all my dreams would come true. You could be far away, But I'd still be there with you. I see you all the time, But have you ever noticed me? Why do you have to be so blind to the world, What can I do to make you see? Is it that My hair's not long? Or maybe that I'm short? Do you not like me because I'm not blonde? Or because I don't like your favorite sport? I don't think it's any of those, Maybe it's just that I can't say. How much you really mean to me, And how I think of you each day. Maybe one day I will tell you, But for now silent is what I'll stay. But you'll still mean so much to me, And I'll think of you each day. It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
don't keep feelings like that in...trust me...put it out on the line and even if the other person doesn't respond, they'll think about it me |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I think feelings like this are worth getting out...if you think of it this way...if you tell the person and they want to be with u too..there ya go!! a match made in heaven  But if it turns out the other way and you guys cant be...then you'll know and you'll be able to move on hopefully...whatever you decide to do i wish you t he best of luck and i hope you get what u want...u deserve it...P.S.-i really liked the title |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here, but like everybody else said.....feelings should usually be expressed in some form or another. Yet, sometimes they shouldn't and if you feel that you're better off not, then that's ok too. Nice poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
::BUMP:: ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I am with Dopey, only when you are ready to come out for your feelings it's ok. But sometimes it could help to show your feelings to the other person. Charisma |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
What a pain for you. Try to live life to the fullest and if you really care about this person that much, tell them! Don't just leave your mind open wondering what could have happened. ~AF~ Maybe I'm just a girl...interupted. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This was a really nice read, I think it flowed really nicely and was simple without being shallow and deep without being confusing... Really good job. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
This is one I can say flowed very well. Good word choice, and a very vived picture was paitned. Nicely done! I'm with annoynomous female! Live life to the fullest, and just tell him! If he's worth it, take the shot chica! Good luck. Sincerely, Titus "Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling |
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