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Emotional Radar |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Emotional Radar Cloak and dagger no surprise, Saw deceit lay in your eyes, Something that you can't disguise, It's on your face. Saw your face well up with tears, See the terror from your fears, Feel the love lost and how it sears, It's not my disgrace. Think that I could love you back, When you've got a heart so black, Don't worry I won't turn my back, Just let me have my space. It seems that I am back in fashion, Since you've lost all your compassion, I'll loved you then with such a passion, But I leave you now without a trace. This is something from my back catalogue, because I'm not writing much at the moment I thought I'd share this... "Ph33r Me I eat N00bies Ph0R bReakFAsT" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Ahhhh Zu, I liked it much! I love the way you write... it's unique  Jenn "You've got to get yourself together, you got stuck in a moment, and you can't get out of it." [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 10-05-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
OOOOOOOoooooo OOOoooo!! ...LOVED the format!!  ...im one to fiddle around with formats and i thought that this one was pretty unique. it tied in pretty well with your ideas within the poem- which is excellent when using a new format.. the poem seems really sad and angry at the same time- i hope you got through the emotions quickly!  icantdenymy past |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I hope you're happy with this decision, Zu. Very good piece all the same. Black is always good. In fact, it's fantastic.  Keep strong and thanks for sharing. I love reading your work. It's always a pleasurable experience. ~AF~ I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today? |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
OMG WOW! i luved this ssoooo much, it totally was awesome ! .....AH this is so goin in my library! great, no , FANTASTIC write!  Did u ever have the feeling that he meant everything 2 u, yet u meant nothing 2 him?.....~me |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
wow Zu... I must say I love it, and I know the feeling of not being able to write..however, keep your eyes out, it's coming, I can feel it... but anyway, I love this very much, and just like most of your other poems, it goes into my library I am woman, here me roar...MEOW! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Ohhh, I love your rhyming!!! So awesome!! The poem's great too!  If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
rym/format was awesome...man...quite the emotional piece...wow...but most of all hope things are well...take care, Andrew. =) |
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