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My so called "friend"
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My so called "friend" |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
yeah okay here goes...this is like the first poem Ive wrote in like forever guys... "My so called friend" I wish I could take a break, from the world, and these so called friends Especailly the one, who got involved, and made him call. I seriously have deep hatred for her I dont think Ill ever forgive her The year I wasted on the guy she stuck me with no way out, trapped within. She claims to be a friend yet knows no traits She did this on purpose She probably wishes I were dead She wants my life and I want to laugh, in her PITIFULexcuse for a face Now shes reeling in, on something so dear to me A real true honest and dear friend She wants to ruin my life, cut it up like a butcher, with his knife. "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I have read better from you Alyssa. This poem was OK, but it seemed there could have been more to it. I liked the anger in it though. Angry poems are my fav. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WHOA!!! a lotta anger in this one here...I doubt she wants you dead hun but it sounds like the green monster is rearing its ugly head w/her...She doesnt sound like a true friend and most people arent true friends...dont let her ruin all the good things u have..ur better than her and she knows it! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Come on say it with me "GRRR!!!" Let the anger out in writing, just don't act it out. K? Bel |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem very well written. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Say what you really think next time Alyssa  Definitely some anger in this but you could have made it just a tiny bit more raw. Really ripped into this girl. Friends like that are crap. Just steal her legs and be done with it...lol Thanks for sharing.  ~AF~ "Hi there, can I relay a sonnet your way?" |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
oh you just wait until i get done with my other poem...its so good !!! ive been workin on it for a wile though..lol thanks guys! "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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crazymin83 Junior Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 49Mass |
Hey that was a really good poet. Min <i>I always thought that we would look back on our crying and laugh, but I never knew we would look back on our laughter and cry. J.F.K </i&g |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Hey sis! Great poem! |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
ok ok thanks guys im in a bad mood grrr but still, thanks i aprrecaite it "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
Alyssa~ I loved this poem. I HATE people like that! Jezzika be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
*grabs a baseball bat* ok first off point out who's the person I say she needs a wooping. ok now serious....I think in life you'll meet alot of different ppl, some will try to be your friends for mere convinience and others will be huge hipocrits, I say you have a talk straight out face to face with this backstabber, clear up a few things, and if she has to choose, straight out sincerity and trust or nothing at all. I hope you can work things out, here in pip we're all with ya  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... [This message has been edited by Crash&Burn (edited 09-25-2001).] |
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