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0 posted 2001-09-13 08:14 PM


Thinkin’ ‘bout the times we used 2 go clubbin’
How we used 2 shake it on the dance floor.
Thinkin’ ‘bout when U used 2 go out shopppin’
Spendin’ my money why is that no more.
My phone bills gettin’ bigger but I don’t care
Be leavin’ messages till U understand.

I’ll never let U go
That I love U so
But how much U’ll never know
If U don’t pick up that phone.
( 2x )

Standin’ lookin’ at the spot where we first met
Keep askin’ my self where did I go wrong.
So much pain inside that I’d rather be dead
Got U’r pictures all over my wall.
Turnin’ on the radio playin’ our song
Be callin’ till U understand darlin’

I’ll never let U go
That I love U so
But how much U’ll never know
If U don’t pick up that phone.
( 2x )


I’ll never let U go
That I love U so
But how much U’ll never know
If U don’t pick up that phone.
( 2x )


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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2001-09-13 08:20 PM


sounds like something Prince would do *sigh* love this........very well done.  

"It's true/the way I feel
was promised by your face
the sound of your voice
painted on my memories
even if you're not with me
I'm with you"
~LP~

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-09-14 03:10 AM


Nice piece but the chorus sounds really psychotic. Actually, it reminds me of a stalker. You're not going to let her go. Hell, if it's over, it's over. If she doesn't want to talk, you've got to move on. It sounds harsh but reality is cruel.

Take care and keep writing.  

~AF~

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3 posted 2001-09-20 01:52 PM


If u don't pick up that phone lol.  Maybe this person need a little time.  Maybe you're asking for too much right now.  I'm not sure, but as far as I know, if a person doesn't want to answer the phone, the person doesn't want to talk to you.  Give some time and see what happens.  Thanks for Sharing

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4 posted 2001-09-21 12:23 PM


great poem very well written.
robin

bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha

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