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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I thought I'd do my own tribute to the calamity and horror of today. Words cannot express what I felt as a result of it. Nor can this poem. Panic Gaping hole under me We fall down down down Slowly Support struts impale me We rain blood blood blood I just I just wanted to live We were white they are dark "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
very well done! good work.hmmmmm i think i get it. robin Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wow out of all the pieces I have read about this event, this one chilled me. The repetition probably caused such an effect but wow...very good work, Frac. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This definately was chilling, especially since over 30 people i kno either experienced, saw in person, or died from it since im only 20 min away from the city...Its a really tough thing to put into words b/c words will never do enough justice...but this was a wonderful tribute |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Another nice tribute. I think I picked up on what you were trying to bring across. Great job on the poem. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"We were white they are dark" I need some help on this I can't seem to understand what it means thanks hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Think dust acire.  "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thanks, everyone, for the compliments. After I'd finished posting this poem[well, more appropriately, a couple days after] I became quite worried about just what meaning people were getting from that final stanza that Acire had some trouble with. Specifically, I was afraid that it might carry across some racial message. [IE 'we, the white guys, were taking down by the black guys, and so they're no good.' sorta thing]. Those final four lines relate directly to the two lines preceding them. Those lines portray the overall innocence of the victims when compared to those who committed the terrible act. This comparison is further highlighted by the final lines: "We were white they are dark" I have used the image of white to signify innocence. This white contrasts with the darkness of the perpetrators, who remain faceless so as to reinforce the fact that there was no excuse for the terrorist act. Because there was absolutely no excuse for this act, it's perpetrators remain, in this poem, nameless and faceless, as they stand as an icon for nothing of worth. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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