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Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-09-04 04:26 PM

This is another poem, for when I was feelings low...

The BattleField of Life:

The war of life, the fight of hope.
The outcome is different for all,
But the fight is still the same.
The seige that people call life,
Is the price we pay for happiness.

But is our happiness really worth it?
The fight lasts for all eternity...
But the happiness, is merely mortal.
Like us, it can be slain...and crushed.
Does happiness last, even after death?

And here I am, inept to the grueling war.
I am hurt by my allies...and beaten by my foes.
The price for happiness is pretty high.
As I lay helpless on the ground...
Waiting to be taken from this war.

But that is only a dream,
And not many dreams come true...

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I hope you like this one!

~ Alex

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

1 posted 2001-09-04 04:37 PM

Hey Alex!
I don't remember you showing me this one...

BAH!!!

Anywho, you wrote this with great emotion...full of dispair and sorrow. I suppose life is a battlefield...except we can choose to win or not.
The last lines were quite effective.
A dark, yet subtle poem. Good work!

°L.§.W.°

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-09-04 10:37 PM

"I am hurt by my allies...and beaten by my foes."
Ya had some nice thoughts in here. Though the last 2 lil lines by theirself I didn't much like...Then again I'm a bit odd. HaHa. As always, thanks for the read! Great write!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 09-04-2001).]

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2001-09-04 11:23 PM

Does happiness last, even after death?

wow..i liked this one lots alex. i liked the use of elipses in your piece too- it helped break it up a bit and slow it down. i think you did a really good job of this one dude. thanks for the read!...oh yeah im assuming that youre feeling a bit better now..but if you're not then *hugs*..

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anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-09-04 11:28 PM

"But that is only a dream,
And not many dreams come true..."

i love how you ended it...a lot of thought went into this...well expressed...i liked it.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

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