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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
Never misunderstand me, Open your eyes and you'll see. I'm not what your friends think, Back into the murkiness I sink. Eyes flickering in the light, The rest is out of sight. Nothing to be seen, No person too mean. GET BACK! Set yourself on your own track. Don't try to be bold, Same old story gets told. Once you've seen me, Try to what what you didn't see. GO AWAY! Why do you attempt to stay? Leaving you behind in the ruins of my soul, All that's there is a dark hole. The surperstition causes a system breakdown, Wake up and get to the surface before you drown. Face it, There you sit. You're immune to what you are, Pull yourself from the bar. Whats the matter with your own way? You use it day after day. Why are you freakin me out again? When all the time has been. Try it, Harder than me you can't hit. Brought back from the ashes, Only to be served 1000 more lashes.... Eternal agony, invisions of carnage, needles stabbing you in the eye, this is what its like when doves cry |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I absolutely loved this poem. I have to admit I'm not quite sure exactly what it means to you as the writer or what inspired you to write it, but it struck a good chord with me. You have an awesome way with words. Great job, can't wait to read more from you. ~Kay~ We need guidance, we've been misled |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
well thank ya, im not exactly sure what inspired it, just was thinkin and listenin to music and started writtin it =oÞ Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow this was awesome...but ihave to tell you i have NO idea what you are going on about here kyle...its sounds great all the same. i enjoyed this one LOTS! you write sum very good poems buddy!...keep em coming!  ............Daffodils |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, even though I don't get it, it seems to be saying stay away from me, in a very emotionally charged way. at any rate, I liked it |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
I LOVED THIS poem it was grrrrrrrrrrrrrreat! it is now in my libary!!! !~Andrea~! |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
aww come on now my poetry isnt that good guys sheesh =oÞ Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hmmm...no, I agree. You're very good with words! Ad you poetry IS that good! |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hmmm...no, I agree. You're very good with words! And you poetry IS that good! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one. Mostly the ending though. Well done on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
*bonks kyle on the head*....i hope that HURTS you kyle!...geez...when i say its GOOD you best believe it buddy!..... weirdo....HEE HEE!!!! S |
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