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Paula Finn
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missouri

0 posted 2001-06-02 01:29 AM


Its wanting to rain

Like a flood of desire
storming through me at your touch
Washing me in a deluge
of desire.

Thunder

Hard, low, and rumbling
your hands hot on my body
Vibrating to the very
core of me.

Lightening

Piercing the night sky
flash after flash of liquid heat
Searing me with your kiss
illuminating my soul.

Soft on my skin, sweet on my lips

Comes the rain

© Copyright 2001 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
SilentSongs
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Mist of Time
1 posted 2001-06-02 02:01 AM


I for one
enjoy the rain
admire thunder
the music undeniable

let it wash in sound
and waters Heaven Born
all pasts of pain
in and outside thee


I sing a silent song in hopes of all.

"The past my prison, confined in solitary voiceless penance."

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-06-02 07:10 AM


WHEW....we dont get this kind of forecast on the weather channel  
very nice girlie...a sensual summer-heaat shower.
well done poetess P.

Im searchin for my warrior
walkin the tracks of time
this struggle to seek forgiveness
like chains and shackles...these ghosts of mine

ethome
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3 posted 2001-06-02 07:13 AM


Girl you are on fire here! I'll send down a bucket of water to cool you off but first I'll have to throw one on me!!  Great poem!!
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2001-06-02 07:22 AM


Paula!...
well done!

Logan
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Arkansas
5 posted 2001-06-02 09:39 AM


so THAT was what caused the deluge we recieved here. Very nice play with the elements, all of them...gentle smile, way to go Paula
Sven
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6 posted 2001-06-02 10:29 AM


now this is the kind of rain that I'm talking about. . .  

great job Paula. . . you presented this well. . .

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Interloper
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Deep in the heart
7 posted 2001-06-02 11:18 AM


Wow!  Brilliant as a bolt of lightening!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


Watersign6
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8 posted 2001-06-02 11:20 AM


hot hot hot  
Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-06-02 12:30 PM


(Lightning) spell

The entire poem was loaded with imagery and I was caught up in it!

brian madden
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ireland
10 posted 2001-06-02 03:18 PM


Like a flood of desire
storming through me at your touch
Washing me in a deluge
of desire.


It feels that moment before the storm when the hot air meets cold and you can feel something in the atmosphere waiting to ignite. YOu captured that feeling perfectly.

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

JamesMichael
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11 posted 2001-06-02 04:12 PM


Paula this poem is sensual, soft and lovely...James
Marsha
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12 posted 2001-06-02 04:39 PM


Paula sweet sister, don't you just love the rain when it splashes down like that.

Absolutely burning nights love, could you be any better as a teacher? No I think not, this is what I meant girl, you are A writer

            love and warm stuff
              Take care love as ever
                Mushy
                    
                        

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Paula Finn
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missouri
13 posted 2001-06-03 02:28 PM


SilentSongs...I too love the rain...thank you for your poetic reply...

JanetMarie...LMAO...change channels girlie....thanks

ethome...hey we can get wet togther ok? LOL thank you sweet poet man...

Karilea...thank you!!!

Logan...LOL well yeah...you arent all that far from me now are you? Thank you

Sven...is there any other kind? Thank you

Interloper...Glad you think so...thanks

Kathleen...Its nice to get caught up isnt it? Thank you

brian...thank you Im happy you think so...

James...kinda like a soft Hawaiian rain huh? Thanks sugar

Marsha...I am not a teacher lovie...I write from my heart you know that... you know

Marsha
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14 posted 2001-06-03 07:06 PM


Paula dearest sister, don't argue with your sister, YOU have a gift dear heart, and I'm soooooo glad I have the best writers to enchant me and encourage me. Now go write, and when you've finished put my name there at the bottom, just so it looks as if I could once write some magic. Now get thee hence and write, write, write. Besides isn't it time to write your ass...ets off. There's so much magic in your pen love you wouldn't miss a little would you? No I thought not?
     

Take care
Love and warm stuff
Mushy

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Paula Finn
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missouri
15 posted 2001-06-04 12:40 PM


LMAO Marsha you are sooooo silly girl...

Watersign6 Im so sorry I missed your reply before...glad I could heat you up

Saunni
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16 posted 2001-06-04 01:12 AM


Woohoo Paula, you sure said it well. Nice write here as always  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Temptress
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Mobile, AL
17 posted 2001-06-04 02:24 AM


*DOES A RAIN DANCE*

I LOVE this.    

forevernbluejeans
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18 posted 2001-06-07 01:22 AM


Makes me wish for a good hard......rain
Jenn E
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Kelowna, BC, Canada
19 posted 2001-06-08 10:34 AM


I LOVED THIS!!!!!!!!!!!
Jenn E

Paula Finn
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missouri
20 posted 2001-06-08 01:18 PM


Saunni...thank you lol...glad you liked it...

Temptress...dance on pretty one....

forevernbluejeans...lol...me too

JennE....thank you

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