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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2001-05-29 08:02 AM

Heat of my Garden

In gardens of my minds entwine
I hear Sibelius sweet and low.
The music pours like heady wine
About her curves of sensuous flow

Stygian was my black of night
And Gordian the cords of toll
The only freedom was new light
To opened up my phantoms goal.

And the breeze dared what I did not
In tender spill it had its will
It glides her skin of apricot.
And echoes back in raptures thrill.

A thousand grapes of agony
Has opened up the bars of jail
Has sent me into ecstasy.
And now I see through heavens veil.

For I am curled in minds extreme
An Ibsens world of tranquil dream.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-05-29 08:59 AM

a sirenian's dream of complete compress
but no walk back and never regress
to float forward, in stride of light
for tho now gone from me, I still reach beyond the bright...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-29 09:05 AM

In gardens of my minds entwine
I hear Sibelius sweet and low.
=====================
Stygian was my black of night
And Gordian the cords of toll
====================
And the breeze dared what I did not
In tender spill it had its will
It glides her skin of apricot.
And echoes back in raptures thrill.

A thousand grapes of agony
Has opened up the bars of jail
Has sent me into ecstasy.
And now I see through heavens veil.

For I am curled in minds extreme
An Ibsens world of tranquil dream.
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there are so many cool lines in this, I cant pick....
Do you see all the things we can learn from that vast mind of yours.
The places your vision takes us...
the imagery in this is so cool...as are the references to some of your fav muscians and writers...
By your words of rhyme divine from gifted pen...
you take us to that place in the mind where we can "just be"
very cool write Stinky...
like walking barefoot that verdant garden of your mind

*ww*

me

I'm hanging on your every word
Even if you dont want to speak tonite
It's alright
I'm sitting outside heaven's door
listening to you breathe

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-05-29 12:46 PM

Decaflame,
A wonderful quote, one of yours I'm sure. Thank you.

JM,
I've put some honey in a cup
Some raspberry tea to sup
For that is all that I can do
To please the humming bird in you.
Winkiewinkie Stinky

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

4 posted 2001-05-31 01:54 PM

I'll admit that a few of the name references went over my head but I feel I can be forgiven for that as I only discovered Kafka recently.
anyway ranting here, while I was not able to grasp the importance of the names that did not stop me fropm enjoying this beautifully written poem.

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-31-2001).]

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

5 posted 2001-05-31 01:55 PM

what an absolutely lovely read. A lovely sonnet, indeed

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2001-05-31 02:00 PM

               " And the breeze dared what I did not
                In tender spill it had its will
                It glides her skin of apricot.
                And echoes back in raptures thrill.

                A thousand grapes of agony
                Has opened up the bars of jail
                Has sent me into ecstasy.
                And now I see through heavens veil.

                For I am curled in minds extreme
                An Ibsens world of tranquil dream."

Man oh man Seymour that's excellent writing! I can't say anything more!

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

7 posted 2001-05-31 03:35 PM

Sy~
I always walk away smiling from one of your posts...you write with amazing style my friend...awesome writing~

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2001-06-15 07:46 PM

To touch on your poetry, in any way possible...is a blessing to my soul...

touched...again...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2001-06-15 11:49 PM

Brian,
Thank you so much.

Irish,
Thank you for the lovely.

Ethome,
Your grasp of the text was all the praise I needed. Thank you

Butterflies,
Thank you for the awesome.

Sunshine,
You have a very large soul. *L*

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